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	Anonymous [More info] My family is middle. There are only five members in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother,my sister and me.My mather is a nurse.She is about fifty years old. She is a few years younger than my father.She works at home and outside home.Everyone in my family is good and happy. She also tell us many interesting stories. Sometimes she help us in our homework.Sometimes she take us to the cinema.My mother work in office in hospital.I am very lucky to have a wonderful family.She is very kind to us.When I went to stay with my parents in the summer she had many ativities for family enjoyed.She tried and work hard for family.My mother is angry if I dont's believe her. My mother met my father .Than thay were married in 1960. And then they have many kids. Fianlly, I love my family very much and I feel proud with mother. My mother name is Somang Chatchawal. Her is a spa manager. Her is 56 years old. Her height is 150 and her weight is 54. Her lives in Pattaya,Chonburi. Her is very kind and beautiful. Her has three sons and one daughter. Her likes cooking. On free time, her likes going to temple with me. Her favorites are fruits such as apple orange grape and melon. I love my mother very much. My mother is idol for me. My brother name' s Artthapon Koetthaiong and he nickname is Kai. He is 17 years old. He living with my father and a grandson at Roi-Et. He studying senior high school at Phatumrat Pitayakom school. He like watching cenema and playing computer. He an economize and a playful very much. He like to make we are leugh when, we are serious but we are leugh sometime. He like the winter but he don't like the summer. Because he is a hot weather. He want to be a policeman. [They are re-formed as a single post by a moderator. By this way, it will be easier for you to follow your posts.] Anonymous


	+1 Doll [More info] Anonymous “My family is middle. There are only five members in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother,my sister and me.My mather is a nurse.She is about fifty years old. She is a few years younger than my father.She works at home and outside home.Everyone in my family is good and happy. She also tell us many interesting stories. Sometimes she help us in our homework.Sometimes she take us to the cinema.My mother work in office in hospital.I am very lucky to have a wonderful family.She is very kind to us.When I went to stay with my parents in the summer she had many ativities for family enjoyed.She tried and work hard for family.My mother is angry if I dont's believe her. My mother met my father .Than thay were married in 1960. And then they have many kids. Fianlly, I love my family very much and I feel proud with mother. My mother name is Somang Chatchawal. Her is a spa manager. Her is 56 years old. Her height is 150 and her weight is 54. Her lives in Pattaya,Chonburi. Her is very kind and beautiful. Her has three sons and one daughter. Her likes cooking. On free time, her likes going to temple with me. Her favorites are fruits such as apple, orange, grape and melon. I love my mother very much. My mother is idol for me. My brother name' s Artthapon Koetthaiong and he nickname is Kai. He is 17 years old. He living with my father and a grandson at Roi-Et. He studying senior high school at Phatumrat Pitayakom school. He like watching cenema and playing computer. He an economize and a playful very much. He like to make we are leugh when we are serious but we are leugh sometime. He like the winter but he don't like the summer. Because he is a hot weather. He want to be a policeman. [They are re-formed as a single post by a moderator. By this way, it will be easier for you to follow your posts.] ” Hello Anon. It is very obvious that you are a beginnner. I found a lot of errors in your paragraphs. I changed their colour. They are red. Okay? Change them and send again. I will check again. I hope you can understand what I write here. Doll Joined on Sat, Mar 10 2007 Senior Member 2,888

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“My family is middle class family. There are only five members in my family. They are my father, mother, brother,sister and me.My mother is a nurse.She is about fifty years old. She is a few years younger than my father.She works at home and outside home.Everyone in myfamily is good and happy. She also tell us many interesting stories. Sometimes she help us inour homework.Sometimes she take us to the cinema.My mother work in a office at a hospital.I am very lucky to have a wonderful family. She is very kind to us. When I went to stay with my parents in the summer she had many activities for family which we enjoyed.She works hard for the family.

My mother name is Somang Chatchawal. She is a spa manager. She is 56 years old. Her height is 150 and her weight is 54.She lives in Pattaya,Chonburi. She is very kind and beautiful. She has three sons and one daughter. Her likes cooking. During her free time, she likes going to the temple with me. Her favorites fruits are apple, orange, grape and melon. I love my mother very much. My mother is idol for me.

My brother name' s Artthapon Koetthaiong and his nickname is Kai. He is 17 years old. Heis living with my father and a grandson at Roi-Et. He is studying at the senior high school at Phatumrat Pitayakom school. He likes watching cinema and playing computer. He is a playful boy who wants to be a policeman in future.

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+1 by Anonymous [More info]

My family is a middle Class family . There are only five members. My father, my mother, my brother,my sister and me.My mother Occupation is That she is a nurse. She is about fifty years old. She is few years younger than my father.She Is a house wife .Some times She tells us interesting stories. help us in our home work and take us to the cinema.I am very lucky that i have a Wounderful mother which cares alot .She is also very kind .When I went to stay with my parents in the summer.my mother had having many ativities .My mother become very angry if I do not believe her. My mother has met my father and Then thay had married in 1960. Then they have 5 kids. Finally, I love my family very much and I feel proud that i have a very good mother

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