Effective Writing

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#113398 Tue, 28 Jun 05 09:38 PM

Which version is considered most effective writing? Is it the first one? Is it a grammatically correct sentence.

1. Once you have the estimates of the missing data availability, we could forward this to Mark.

2. Once you have the estimates for the availability of the missing data, we could forward this to Mark.

3. Once you have the estimates for the availability of the data that is missing, we could forward this to Mark

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Effective Writing

Clive

#113432 Wed, 29 Jun 05 01:21 AM

Hi,
If you want effective writing, I don't like any of these sentences. The main reason is that it's very vague to talk about estimating availability. What 'you' are really trying to estimate is the date on which the missing data will be available. I suggest this briefer and more direct version is more effective writing:

Once you have estimated when the missing data will be available, we could forward this information to Mark.

Best wishes,
Clive

Clive