Emergency - Help me checking my cover letter, please

I have to send quickly a cover letter to an international organization.
Would you please help me and correct my cover letter - Big Emergency!!!

Dear Hiring Manager:

I am writing to express my interest in the position of first officer with recruitment group of the Human Ressources Unit being open at this time with your organization. My main concerns had always been the human ressources where I prioritary raised my competences by developing and implementing successfull modern human ressources solutions. Now I would like to bring my more than 11 years of experience reach in importants international groups to work for you.

Added to technological training, my engeening shool named “Arts & Métiers” is famous to strongly focus on human ressources issues. I was trained on mangement by the best rated french consultants. I learned about recruiting, detecting talents, developing competences, motivating teams, communicating and managing the internal opportunities. In many kinds of situation I had to manage different teams composed of workers, administratives, technicians, engineers, men or wemen coming from different countries. My goal often was to find the most efficient work organization best fitted to the employees.

I had hired nearly 200 people to build new teams or complete existing ones. I evaluated my hiring successfull rate over 95%. It is very exiting for me to find the profiles that fits to the post to be applied. I like the first contact when I have to evaluate the behaviour of the applicants. I am recognized to have a strong feeling to detect interesting talents.

To help me in this task I had sometimes to develope some partnerships with temporary work agencies. I wanted them to send me the best profiles. An evaluation of their performances allow me to improve their services, which avoid me to loose too much time because of unsucessfull recruitments.

My second concern is Quality. As a good qualitician, I like to perform with formalized procedures to found my actions on validated bases. I am used to manage work groups to solve any kind of issues. This is a virtuous way allowing to find good solutions that fit everybody. I was involded in a EFQM environnement.


The accompanying résumé should serve to give you an idea not only of my past achievments but of my potential for making a significant contribution to your organization.

Thank you for your time and consideration.


Sincerely yours


Thank you very much for your help ;o)