Essay: Why do you think people attend college or university?

NC7Reasons for people to attend college or university are various and depend on one’s attitudes. But the three most important ones that make people choose college or university as the gate to their future are job opportunities, increased knowledge and essential skills preparation for future life.

First and foremost, I think the most important reason is that people can get a good job if they have a certificate, especially the one of a famous college or university. Practically, the final purpose after a long process of study for majority [the majority of is the phrase] people is to improve their life by getting a good job. What proves that point of view, obviously, is the fact that most certificates are used to support job applications.

Second, this may be [in this structure, has to be two words; OR "maybe this is the last..."] the last chance for people to study in such an academic environment where professors teach them plenty of knowledge in many aspects; this also helps them to gain an abundant knowledge for future life.

Last but not least, people want to prepare some certain skills which cannot lack in the developed society [this still does not make sense - do you meant that the society lacks these skills? or that the skills are necessary in a developed society?] namely competitive experience, group work ect. Those skills will be efficient weapons for them to compete with others in order to get the job they want. Beside this, people who tend to apply what they learned in college or university really choose the best way to reach success.

What is more, this is a chance for people to live apart from their family; consequently, they can develop their independent characteristics.

In a word [not a good phrase here - "To sum up" "In conclusion", all people are encouraged to attend college or university. The more people attend college or university, the more developed society is. As long as background knowledge and experience decide one’s job opportunities, people who attend college or university are constructing their future by the best materials. The verb "construct" takes "with".

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I've edited the essay, please check it again and show me which sentences make the essay not smooth. I really want to perfect my first iBT essay

What's wrong with this sentence: people who attend college or university are constructing their future by the best materials.

NC7Reasons for people to attend college or university are various and depend on one’s attitudes. But the three most important ones that make people choose college or university as the gate to their future are job opportunities, increased knowledge and essential skills preparation for future life.

First and foremost, I think the most important reason is that people can get a good job if they have a certificate, especially the one of a famous college or university. Practically, the final purpose after a long process of study for the majority of people is to improve their life by getting a good job. What proves that point of view, obviously, is the fact that most certificates are used to support job applications.

Second, maybe this is the last chance for people to study in such an academic environment where professors teach them plenty of knowledge in many aspects; this also helps them to gain an abundant knowledge for future life.

Last but not least, people want to prepare some certain skills which a successful persson cannot lack[ok - by "do without" is better] in the developed society, namely competitive experience, group work ect. Those skills will be efficient weapons for them to compete with others in order to get the job they want. Beside this, people who tend to apply what they learned in college or university really choose the best way to reach success.

What is more, this is a chance for people to live apart from their family; consequently they can develop their independent characteristics.

In conclusion, all people are encouraged to attend college or university. The more people attend college or university, the more developed society is. As long as background knowledge and experience decide one’s job opportunities, people who attend college or university are contructing their future with the best materials.

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I've edited it again.
I have a question.
I think the most important reason is that people can get a good job if they have a certificate, especially the one of a famous college or university.
In this sentence I used 'the one' to indicate 'certificate' but you told me it should be 'one'; this seems it indicate a university or college...can you tell me why? "one" here refers to "certificate". On looking at your sentence, there is a change I think you should make: "...can get a good job if they have a qualification from a famous...". "Qualification" in this context will mean degree, diploma, or certificate.

I also found that 'construct' takes 'of'/'from'/'out of'. Is there any difference between those words involving 'with' as you said. Not really. Any will do in this context.

I'm affected by my mother tongue's stylistics so the essay seems not as smooth as I thought...
Please tell me the way to get acquainted with English stylistics... thz so much Read, and read, and read, and .... [you get the idea?]. Even native speakers have to work at their writing. You are doing ok.