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Latest post Fri, Nov 14 2008 10:31 AM by loko. 2 replies.
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loko  +  587265 Thu, 13 Nov 08 01:42 PM
please help me check my grammar, also wrting style, is my English weird?

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Study is the most important thing in our life, we will always learn in the whole life. Everyone want to study more than what they get in the present. University where everyone wants to be in is the highest degree in education. In university, people can prepare for their career, increase knowledge, and get new experiences.

First of all, university is the best choice if you want to prepare well for your career. With a diploma of the high school, you can get a job which helps you to live well. But if economic crisis occurs, to have a job is very difficult. Companies must fire employee to cut down fund and this causes people come back to university where they can get the certificate to ensure their job.

Secondly, university is a good environment to increase knowledge. When you are in university, you can approach the ocean of knowledge within libraries. Reading book which is necessary when you learn in university or institute will help you to know deeply in knowledge. Furthermore, you have opportunity to meet professors who give you good advice and in your courses.

Additionally, in a high degree, interest things of research will come to you. When you were a child, maybe you dream to be a scientist or artist, university is the best place to grow up your dreaming. In college or institute you will have discussions with your friends, do teamwork, sink into labs, all of it will bring to you more and more emotion, experience.

University is not only way you must to go, you can have other options but this is the shortest and firmest way to prepare your life. 

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ferpectedit  +  587332 Thu, 13 Nov 08 06:03 PM
I work for an online editing and proofreading service. Please see my profile for more information. I won't do the whole essay here, but I will show you how I would revise your first paragraph.

Study is the most important activity in which we can engage. We learn throughout our whole lives. Everyone wants to have more knowledge. University is where one goes to gain the highest level of education. In university, students can prepare for a career, increase knowledge, and be exposed to new experiences.

I tried to clarify, sometimes guessing at your meaning. I removed awkward, ungrammatical or overly informal phrases like "thing in our life" and "want to study more than what they get in the present." Also avoid vague references to "people" when you can. "Students" is a good substitute here. In the rest of the essay (and maybe starting in the first paragraph) you should try to be more specific, as the question instructs, about why someone you know or someone you have studied or admired went to university.

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loko, 1 yr 8 days ago
thanks you, Smile
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