Essay - Parents are the best teachers

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Here´s another essay I need someone to correct
please, help me improve my english! thanks
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Parents are the best teachers. Agree or disagree?

Eduacation is very important in a person´s life; education makes you became an adult. Children can learn from many different parts: from teachers at school, from TV programs, from their parents at home. It is said that children learn the most from their parents. I agree with this belief; in my case this statement became true; I learnt from them so much that I´m probably almost as my parents are.
Children spend the most of their time with their parents and they are always watching what they did and how they did it; even though they don´t realize this. I was surpraised when I found myself a few days ago making a pumpkin soup that tasted just as my mother´s pumpkin soup. I thought I didn´t know how to prepare this soup; nevertheless, I tried to do it. It was really amazing when I realized that I could prepare the soup without formal teaching from my mother; therefore I just learnt watching her cook.
Other way you can realize that children learn the most from their parents is to pay attention in how daughter and son´s personalities are similar to those of their parents. There is a belief that pesons when became old are going to be just as their parents were. I can see this in my father, he´s becoming every day much more similar to my grandfather. His behaviour is almost the same of that of his father; he is even copying things that bother him from his father.
Children also can learn from other adults but at certain age they can reflect or analyse if they believe or not what they have heard or see; however, almost all the time they don´t doubt about their parent´s stories. Remember the film “The Big Fish”? There is an example of this: the main character of this film belief until he was an adult all the fantastic stories that his father told him; althought he knew their were unbelievable from everybody else.
Parents are very important in children´s education. They are an example, probably the most important, for becoming an adult. We all are, in certain way, very similar to our parents; we all have behavoiurs, or tastes, or hobbies that we learnt from our parents. It´s important to remeber this when you have your own child; he´s going to copy you many things, no matter they are good or bad things. As parents we have to realize the responsabilty we have of teaching our sons and daughters the best we can. Don´t ever forget that your the most important teacher for your child.
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Anonymous:
wow!! nice huh.,....i just loved it Emotion: smile
Anonymous:
last paragraph, third line : you put '' .. hobbies that we LEARNT from our parents ''
it's not learnt it is learned*
Anonymousit's not learnt it is learned*
Hi Anon,

You'd better get yourself a good dictionary. Learnt is fine in British English. Follow the links below.

http://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/british/learn

http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/learn

http://www.oxfordadvancedlearnersdictionary.com/dictionary/learn
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Anonymous:
its the third line ........... mind it
Anonymous:
you should concentrate only on one main idea, seems like you having more then one main idea and this making your essay unclear and vague ,your support statement is nice and example is equally good but you didn't organized it well, you should write in organize manner and try to differentiate them in different paragraph,also if you can use signpost that can make your essay more effective so good luck:)
I express my point of views.I hope it will be helpful!

"Eduacation is very important in a person´s life; education makes you became an adult."

I think 'became' is wrong for this situation and you must use 'become'
If i were you, i would write this sentence:
"Eduacation is very important in anybody's life;it distinguishes humans from animals"

"Children can learn from many different parts"

I think instead of "from", it's better to use the word 'through' and also use 'ways' instead of 'parts'.

"I agree with this belief"
'idea'

"in my case this statement became true"
"has become"
Alternative:
"this idea has interpreted true in my case"

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"I learnt from them so much that I´m probably almost as my parents are."

"I learnt/(have learnt) so much from my parents that i almost behave the same way as they do"

"what they did and how they did it"

You are talking in general not something happened in the past; so you must use the simple form of the verb 'do'.

"therefore I just learnt watching her cook."

preferred alternative:

"therefore i have learnt it unconsciously just through watching her cooking"

"They are an example"

Use the word 'pattern' instead of example!

"he´s going to copy you (on) many things"

you need an 'on' after you

Alternative:

"they are going to imitate your doings.Actually We are a mirror for our children!"

"Don´t ever forget that your the most important teacher for your child."

Alternative:

"Never forget that you're the most important teacher for your children."
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