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Animals Commandments

The commandments Old Major gives to the animals change into many difference meanings, and finally evolve into one simple rule for all animals. The only rule the animals have to remember is “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123). In the end all the rules vanish from the animals mind to remember only one.

The first commandment states “Whatever goes upon two legs is an enemy" (Orwell pg.33).
This commandment evolves to “Four legs good, two legs better” (Orwell pg.122).
The change is made because of the following: humans visit the farm, trading begins, and Squealer walks on hind legs (Alkiviadou, Natalie, and Martin Nordal).

The second commandment, outlined by Old Major, states “Whatever goes upon four legs, or has wings, is a friend” (Orwell pg.33). This commandment did not change, but Napoleon orders the dogs to attack Snowball and orders Raven to leave (Alkiviadou, Natalie, and Martin Nordal).

The third commandment outlines “No animal shall wear clothes” (Orwell pg.33). Napoleon breaks this rule by putting on Jones clothes. The dogs wear collar, and the pigs put on green ribbons on their tails. Nothing is added or deleted except it is broken.

The fourth commandment says, “No animal shall sleep in a bed” (Orwell pg.33). It changes to “No animal shall sleep in a bed with sheets” (Mason). The pigs move into the farmhouse and sleep in the beds (Mason). This led to the changing of the fifth commandment.

The fifth commandment states “No animal shall drink alcohol” (Orwell pg.33). While in the farmhouse, the pigs find some whisky and beer. They drink the whisky until they are drunk. They change the commandment to “No animal shall drink alcohol to excess” (Orwell pg.103). This influences the pigs to start brewing beer for themselves (Mason).

The sixth commandment values “No animal shall kill another animal” (Orwell pg. 33). Many of the hens and pigs are killed by the dogs that Napoleon raises. This led to the commandment being changed to “No animal shall kill another animal without cause” (Orwell pg.88).

The seven commandment states originally “All animals are equal” (Orwell pg.33), but it changes to “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123) toward the end of the story. It always is a problem being the pigs are smarter. Also the pigs have many advantages over many others animal. For example, the pigs get up an hour late, eat apples and drink milk.


All of the commandments were reduce to one commandment after many changes. The accepted rule is “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123). As it turns out, the rules that the animals have always remembered are lost in their mind to one.





Works Cited
Alkiviadou, Natalie, and Martin Nordal. Animal Farm The Book . 30 Apr.
2003. (01 Feb. 2005) .
Mason, Angela. "BookRags Book Notes on Animal Farm." 2000. (7 Feb. 2005) .
Orwell, George. Animal Farm. New York City: Penguin Group, 1946. 15-128.

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Animals Commandments

The commandments Old Major gives to the animals change into many difference meanings, and finally evolve into one simple rule for all animals. The only rule the animals have to remember is “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123). In the end all the rules vanish and the animals mind to remember only one.

The second commandment, outlined by Old Major, states “Whatever goes upon four legs, or has wings, is a friend” (Orwell pg.33). This commandment did not change, but Napoleon orders the dogs to attack Snowball and orders Raven to leave (Alkiviadou, Natalie, and Martin Nordal).

The sixth commandment values “No animal shall kill another animal” (Orwell pg. 33). Many of the hens and pigs are killed by the dogs that Napoleon raises. This led to the commandment being changed to “No animal shall kill another animal without cause” (Orwell pg.88).

The seven commandment states originally “All animals are equal” (Orwell pg.33), but it changes to “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123) toward the end of the story. It always is a problem with the pigs being smarter. Also the pigs have many advantages over many others animal. For example, the pigs get up an hour late, eat apples and drink milk.

All of the commandments were reduce to one commandment after many changes. The accepted rule is “All animals are equal and some are more equal than others” (Orwell pg.123). As it turns out, the rules that the animals have always remembered are lost in their mind to one.