Fashion

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Veris  #359950  Fri, 04 May 07 12:19 AM

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“Fashion is too expensive and changeable”. Do you agree or disagree?

 

Every year, the most fashionable collection of clothes is presented in prestigious
shops in order to persuade people to renew their wardrobes. Undoubtedly, that implies to spend too much money for the followers of fashion. I personally believed that people should reconsider if they indeed have to follow the latest trends which are going to be completely different for the following year.

 

 

To start with, in the beginning of a season we probably purchase new designs. In winter for example, not only do we need to build up a new collection of clothes just to keep ourselves warm, but also we need to have more money due to the fact that costs are higher than in summer. On the one hand, there are some people who say that they prefer to purchase costly clothing because of quality rather than wearing cheap clothes which are useless. On the other hand, others however, contrast that idea saying that they prefer a less quality clothing but have a variety of the latter.

 

 

For those working people, the latest trends influenced on the company’s imagine in a way that make workers update their styles. For instance, sometimes women have to wear fashionable clothes that do not fit neither their body nor their personality.Not to mention the fact that, players of soccer are not allowed to wear t-shirts from a year to another that are out of fashion.

 

  

To conclude, people should rethink if it is necessary to change their wardrobe constantly when they can build up their own style of clothing without spending too much money.

  
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julielai  #361566  Mon, 07 May 07 04:43 PM

Highlighted only the glaring errors...

 Veris wrote:

“Fashion is too expensive and changeable”. Do you agree or disagree?

 

Every year, the most fashionable collection of clothes is presented in prestigious
shops in order to persuade people to renew (wording) their wardrobes. Undoubtedly, that means spending a lot of implies to spend too much money for the followers of fashion. I personally believed that people should reconsider if they indeed have to follow the latest trends which are going to be completely different every year.

 

To start with, in the beginning of a season we probably purchase new designs (designs, not clothes). In winter, for example, not only do we need to build up a new collection of clothes just to keep ourselves warm, but also we need to have more money due to the fact that (what costs) costs are higher than in summer. On the one hand, there are some people who say that they prefer to purchase costly clothing because of quality (quality of what) rather than wearing cheap clothes which are useless (wording). On the other hand, others, however, contrast that idea saying that they prefer a less quality clothing but have a variety of the latter (unclear).

  

For those working people, the latest trends influenced on the company’s imagine in a way that make workers update their styles (wording). For instance, sometimes women have to wear fashionable clothes that do not fit neither their body nor their personality.Not to mention the fact that, players of soccer are not allowed to wear t-shirts from a year to another that are out of fashion.

  

To conclude, people should rethink if it is necessary to change their wardrobe constantly when they can build up their own style of clothing without spending too much money.

  
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