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New2grammar

#545854 Thu, 24 Jul 08 12:49 PM

The profits of our company fell more than twice those of the industry average in the first half of this year.

Is the above corect and natural? If not, please suggest a correction.
Thanks.

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Marius Hancu

#545856 Thu, 24 Jul 08 12:52 PM

???

the industry average does not have profits

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New2grammar

#545859 Thu, 24 Jul 08 12:57 PM

The profits of our company fell more than twice the average decline in the industry in the first half of this year.

How about the above?

New2grammar

Marius Hancu

#545873 Thu, 24 Jul 08 01:25 PM

Simpler:

The profits of our company fell more than twice the industry average in the first half of this year.

Marius Hancu

New2grammar

#546139 Fri, 25 Jul 08 06:38 AM

You version is much better! Thanks, MH.

New2grammar