First time writing a motivation letter. Need you help

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Anonymous  #464942  Wed, 16 Jan 08 01:02 PM
Hey guys and girls.

This is the first time I post something here. I've seen you guys help a lot of people and it would be great if you could just read through this bit of text to see what you think.

Tekst (without my name, ...):

Concerning any current or future employment as a First Officer at Brussels Airlines.

 
Dear Mr./Ms. …,

I have great aspirations for the future of Brussels Airlines and would love to be part of the story. Ever since I was a few months old and made a first flight I forged a connection with aviation. I would love to share this passion with Brussels Airlines.

It is rare to find a leading European establishment that provides the prospects of a long interesting career and the dynamics of a young firm. The diverse fleet and varied destinations across Europe and Africa are very appealing to me. Contributing to a group that drives toward the further success of the company dominating Brussels Airport - the heart of the E.U. – will always be a dream of mine.  (I'm not sure if the reason is visible in here, what do you guys think?)

I chose Sabena Flight Academy because they force you to go beyond what is required from a JAA pilot. Through their high level of experience I hope to offer the best of skills. This learning event, in combination with: my strong sense of responsibility, team spirit, flexibility, loyalty, and assertiveness could be of added value to Brussels Airlines.

In support of my application, I eagerly await your feedback. (I need something to say that i need to meet face to face in here)

Yours sincerely,

name

Thanks a lot

P.S.: I know it needs improving :-)

  
Pilot123  #464957  Wed, 16 Jan 08 01:38 PM
Zomg sorry guys, I made a huge spelling mistake in the title :-D I didn't write the "R" in "YOUR".
  
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