Follow up email after unsuccessful internal interview.....

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Hyps  #49505  Fri, 08 Oct 04 11:27 AM
Background info:

I applied for a job internally within the compliance department. At the moment I do administration but would like to move away from this and preferably into compliance. The position I applied for was 50% admin and 50% compliance. I had excellent feedback from both interviews (it was two stages before the decision was made) but was informed that the person chosen had some prior compliance knowledge (boooooo). At the interview it also became apparent the department was due to grow over the coming months to year. So, I wanted to say thanks and express my interest but what have so far sounds rubbish...so any help would be GREATLY appreciated.

Thanks




"Dear xxxx,

Thank you to both xxxx and yourself for meeting with me. Although I was unsuccessful in regard to the above position I wanted to express that it was a pleasure to meet you both. If the department does grow further (as I'm sure it will) and a position becomes available that you think I may be suited to, please let me know.

Many thanks again for your time."


  
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nona the brit  #49533  Fri, 08 Oct 04 02:09 PM
It doesn't sound rubbish at all.

Sounds fine to me as it is.
  
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Hyps  #49543  Fri, 08 Oct 04 03:23 PM
Nona,

Thank you very much!Smile [:)]
  
sherif_fam  #52227  Tue, 26 Oct 04 10:36 PM
Hi,

The letter sounds good to me as well.

Only one comment: I read someplace that we should not use abbreviations in formal letters, such as (I'm sure...), instead we use (I am sure...).

Best regards,

Sherif
  
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