Can the following be written either way?

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Anonymous  #509817  Mon, 05 May 08 02:10 PM

How significant would it be to include a comma after "subjects?" Would the sentence prove to be gramatically correct without teh comma following the word "subjects?"

 

  • While in placement, I have observed Mrs. McCauley teaching an array of subjects, which include:  math, reading, science, social-studies and writing; these subjects are critical for students to learn because they are the basis by which education is founded.
  • While in placement, I have observed Mrs. McCauley teaching an array of subjects which include:  math, reading, science, social-studies and writing; these subjects are critical for students to learn because they are the basis by which education is founded.

At first, I thought the comma was needed, but upon further review I decided that the comma isn't essential; however, I have since gone back to my previous conclusion and now I'm driving myself bonkers over a simple comma.

  
Grammar Geek  #509843  Mon, 05 May 08 02:52 PM

Commas make a lot of people bonkers. Don't feel bad.

The comma is required, but the colon is incorrect, as is the hyphen in social studies. I would also use a period instead of semi-colon, and would say things are founded ON, not BY, and I don't think you need "to learn." Lastly, those subjects ARE education, so it seems odd to say that you're founding education on something that is education.

You can also just say "... an array of subjects, including math, reading, science, social studies, and writing."

So my version would be:

While in placement, I have observed Mrs. McCauley teaching an array of subjects, including math, reading, science, social studies and writing. These subjects are critical for students because they are the basis on which all future education is founded.

  
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