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Trystwithmyheart

#102450 Tue, 24 May 05 05:33 PM

Know me now
For who I am
Not what I was,

Know me now
For who I try to be
Not what I could be,

Know me now
As the one who gives
Not as the one who takes

Know me now
As the one who loves you
Not as the one who forgot to love

Know me now
As the one who became strong
Not as the one who was weak

Know me now
As the one who will remain
Not as the one who ran away

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I wrote this after reading Anita's poem "know me now". Thank you anita.

Trystwithmyheart

Joined on Mon, Apr 11 2005

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abbie1948

#102492 Tue, 24 May 05 06:56 PM

Tryst, I really like this poem. it sounds like a person growing into maturity and recognising themselves as well as appreciating their lover for the person he/she is. Heart [L]

abbie1948

Joined on Thu, Mar 24 2005

England

Senior Member (2,657)

Hope that helps. Abbie

MrPedantic

#102871 Wed, 25 May 05 11:27 PM

The gradual change of line-lengths has an interesting (cumulative) effect.

MrP

MrPedantic

Joined on Tue, Oct 12 2004

Veteran Member (12,053)

...opella forensis / adducit febris...

Trystwithmyheart

#103038 Thu, 26 May 05 02:06 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read. As for the line lengths it just happened that way but I did notice it when it was done. Thank you again MrP.

Trystwithmyheart

anita_a

#103205 Thu, 26 May 05 09:04 PM

Now you know me and I know you. Big Smile [:D]

It is nice to know that the title of my poem inspired you to write a poem. And thanks for acknowledging...

I liked your poem... Beautiful words and subtle message.

anita_a

Joined on Tue, Jul 27 2004

Sunny California

Regular Member (822)

Cheers,Anita

Fair Lady

#103345 Fri, 27 May 05 08:19 AM

Yeah, that's really striking. I like the wording and the rythm of it. It could make a good song by the way!

Good luck Tryst Wink [;)]

Fair Lady

Joined on Wed, Mar 23 2005

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