keepsmiling

“Respected Sir/Madam,

                            I want to state that (These words are not necessary. It is better to be direct and to the point. ) I had selected Digital Image Processing ( DIP) as a my elective course previously in the beginning. (previously and in the beginning mean the same thing. Choose one or the other, but not both!) But now I have rather decided to complete PHP as my mini project.

                Therefore I am kindly requesting you to change my elective course to PHP.

Thanking you,

Mubeena.

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that is what you should write. I disagree, for the reasons stated above.

from keepsmiling. Everyone should keep smiling!

i hope now you might feel happy.

heheheheheeh

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keepsmiling

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First thing.For the formal letter,you need to to start with 'i want to state that' as it is mandatory in that place where she has to submit. I don't know where the poster is. These words are not necessary for formal letters in most places, and she didn't write it in the original letter.

Second thing,i think she is mature enough to write 'i' as 'I' when she will actually write  a letter.I have been writing lots of answers to posters. I don't assume anything. I try to make the letter better and insure correctness, especially in a request for a formal letter.

Third thing is that,"PREVIOUSLY" is different from "IN THE BEGINNING." as PREVIOUSLY does not give us a idea about the actual timing,it just gives us the idea about the past thing so we don't know when thing took place in the past. True, but the phrases are redundant.  Also, you are putting words in her letter that were not in the original post. When I make suggestions, I try to keep as close as possible to the original meaning, and not add anything extra.

  and  "IN THE BEGINNING" represents the actual timing when something started. so both were right as joint. See above. I have no idea that she made the choice "in the beginning" - there may have been other choices in her prior selections.

Fourth thing is that, when you are changing something, to emphasise that thing you can add 'RATHER' .that was what i did. I am a native speaker of American English. Rather does not sound natural here, and it was not in the original post. .

Fifth thing is that.you add 'THANKING YOU' instead of 'Thank you" Thank you is much more common than "Thanking you", to end a letter. You wrote "thanking", and I crossed out the "ing". Other endings would be more formal such as  Respectfully yours, Sincerely yours.  

Sixth thing is that, 'KEEPSMILING' was my profile name so i wrote 'FROM KEEPSMILING' I smiled because I like your profile name.

I hope you might have got my points. Indeed, and I have answered all of them.

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[EDIT]  You seem to have two threads going on here with different subject lines. Please respect the teachers who volunteer here and do not double-post.