Help with formal letter writing to a university

I don't think I can improve on the letter. I can only say how I would have written it, I suppose, with no claim that it's actually any better!

Dear Sir:

I am interested in applying for admission to the LLB degree program in Law; however, on your website for EU students I was unable to locate the entrance requirements for the degree as they apply specifically to students from Poland. Any help you can provide to inform me of these requirements would be greatly appreciated.

I will graduate in June, 2005. In April, I will be taking Poland's comprehensive final exam for high school students, known as the "Matura Exam", which covers the following subjects:

1) Polish Language
2) English Language
3) History
4) Social Sciences

I look forward to receiving your reply. Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me at wafel@xx.pl.

Sincerely yours,

Greg,

I encourage you to use CalifJim's letter with Mister Micawber's added suggestions. That's the benefit of having three sets of eyes look at it.

I think you're on your way.

Hope you enjoyed our help.

MountainHiker

Hello again.

I'm back with another e-mail as the plot develops;]. This time I'm writing in reply to an e-mail I have received from the UCL's Undergraduate Admissions Officer. As I thought they have no idea what-so-ever about the New Matura exam but I'm not going to inform them of everything yet.

This is the e-mail I'm replying to:
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Thank you for your email regarding admission to the LLB degree at this institution.

I can confirm that you would be eligible for admission to the LLB degree on the basis of the Polish Matura and we would normally expect grades of 5 and 6 in your final examinations. It is only fair to point out, however, that competition for places on the Law degree is extrememly intense and there is no guarantee that an offer of a place will be made, even if you meet our entry requirements.

Further information [...]

I hope this information is helpful.

Yours sincerely
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(I've cut the unnecessary)

And this is the way I intend to reply:

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Grzegorz G
27/5 Boguslawskiego Street
43-600 Jaworzno, Silesia
Poland
wafel@xx.pl

October 6, 2004

XX XX
Undergraduate Admissions Officer
UCL Faculty of Laws
Bentham House
Endsleigh Gardens
London WC1H 0EG
email@ucl

Dear Ms XX,


Thank you for your quick reply to my enquirer.

Unfortunately I can no longer meet UCL’s entry requirements as stated in your e-mail forasmuch Polish Matura exam has now a different form.

Unlike the 'old' Matura, which was an internal exam followed by acquiring a score report with each marks (from 1 - lowest to 6 - highest), the Nowa Matura (“New Matura”) is an external exam with scores reported in the percentage rate of acquired points from each subject test.

Any help you can provide to inform me of UCL’s final requirements which apply to students from Poland would be highly appreciated.

I look forward to receiving your reply. Should you have any further questions, please feel free to contact me at .


Yours sincerely
Grzegorz G


Enclosure: mail2.doc a copy of this letter in the e-mail.
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I'm not happy with the 'percentage scale' and I have no idea how to rephrase it in order to make this part more readable;].


I look forward to any comments and suggestions.

Hello MountainHiker,

ad.1 Well I wasn't precise on that issue: Matura's Subject Tests are evaluated separatly (a student gets individual score from each Subject Test).

You're also right on their student assessment policy; however my extracurricular activities and achievements may be an asset:

> Also I would like to know if any extracurricular activities and achievements are taken into account in admission proces.

^^^^^^^
What do you think about this?

Again thanks for all the help and sorry for the delays from my side - I've had some hardware problems recently;]

Hi MountainHiker,

Thanks for the instant reply - I'm allmost set;]

Here's the Matura Scores part:

"Poland has recently adopted a new test systems. Unlike the "Old Matura," where each course received a mark (from 1 - lowest to 6 - highest), the Nowa Matura (“New Matura”) reports percentage score from the subject tests. Thus, the 5 or 6 score no longer applies."

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
I've re-worded it a bit in order to remove the word 'blended' - percentage scores are reported individually from each subject test.

Looking forward to your next message.