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Latest post Sun, Nov 1 2009 11:56 PM by julielai. 1 replies.
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Anonymous  +  954087 Tue, 27 Oct 09 01:37 AM
Hi all, I am fresh to this forum! I have recently written an essay to apply for a place in an overseas placement programme. I would really appreciate if anyone who with the expertise in the English language could spend a few minutes to give it a review and make it error free! Thank you very much in advance for your kind help! Here is my essay:


My name is LEE Samson Zi Jian, I am a second year student currently major in the programme of Social Policy and Administration.

I have had experience living and studying abroad before, I completed my high school in Malaysia, and before that I had also been studying in Shanghai, China. In the half a year before the summer break, I had been attending the student exchange programme in Nottingham, England. I consider the exchange experience in England as one of the most remarkable events in my life. It had been an important stage in my growth, I learned to be independent in daily life and in pursing my studies. Through my experience of living in a foreign surroundings, I learned to adapt myself to the local way of life, and integrate myself into the local community, both in and out of campus.
My academic performance was quite satisfactory in general, that was something which I had been worrying that I could hardly manage in the beginning, but in the end I have made it, for that I have to thank my fellow friends and schoolmates in England who had been encouraging me and assisting me in the school works and tasks, how dynamic that was!

I would like to take this opportunity to give a brief description about my language proficiency as I believe this may be vital in your decision. I managed to attain an overall score of 7.5 in the IELTS examination which I have attempted last year, though I believe that the score could only represent my performance during the examination, but I hope this would be adequate and sufficient for me to satisfy the language proficiency you anticipate for interns for the overseas attachment programme. From my exchange experience, I feel that language is not a barrier for me to communicate with my foreign colleuges. My proficiency in Putonghua would also enable me to take up any field work in the Chinese Mainland.

I understand that dialogue and communication are important in a working environment, and I am confident in myself to be a compatible assistant for any organization I work in.

Apart from that, I have also mastered the Russian language and several other Chinese regional dialects including the Shanghaiese dialect and Fujian dialect.

I am a student who is enthusiastic in learning, perhaps because I possess a strong sense of curiousity in things. But most important of all, I always possess a humble attitude while learning, I believe that is an essential prerequisite for any gain from it, with the absense of humbleness, we are in no position to learn.


I have to admit that I lack working and field work experience, but I believe that makes the point for me to apply for the overseas attachment, I believe I will be able to gain more out of an overseas internship if I am given the opportunity for attachment II as I will try my best and devote as much effort as I can to learn and accumulate experience from my attachment I which I will be doing in Hong Kong in the coming semester.

I believe it is not entirely the capability and skills of an intern most bodies and organizations are anticipating, but I feel that the willingness to learn and gain the most out of the tasks assigned and working environment is more appreciated by them.

I will take attachment II as the opportunity to share the Hong Kong experience with my foreign collegues. I am strongly confident in the spirit of the Hong Kong people and Hong Kong student to strive for things, being students of PolyU, so are we! I will take every task assigned to me seriously and try my best to complete it perfectly, for me being a person who is meticulous and precise as known to most people. I clearly recognize that I bear a heavy responsibility being a representitive of my alma mater! I shall not let PolyU down, to manage that, first I must not let myself down!

I understand that there are many distinguished mates in my department who are very competitive and capable to take up the task, but I really hope my sincerity and humbleness and sincerity could win your selection.


julielai  +  959362 Sun, 01 Nov 09 11:56 PM

 

I'm not sure that having studied overseas will help your case. Doesn't the university give preference to those who never have a chance to study abroad?

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