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#35596 Sat, 03 Jul 04 11:46 AM

Kindly check the following text for grammatical correctness.

Two display boards have been got made for displaying the names of those who served as Deans of the School as well as Heads of the Departments during the respective periods. It is proposed that radium lettering be had on the boards with the necessary background to enhance the appearance as well as for long durability.

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T.V. Gopal

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#35639 Sat, 03 Jul 04 05:17 PM

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Two display boards have been made for displaying the names of those who served as Deans of the School as well as Heads of the Departments during the respective periods. It is proposed that radium lettering be used on the boards with the necessary background to enhance the appearance and to increase the durability.

Suggestions....

Your second sentence is passive. If you can change it to an active sentence, so much the better.

Who proposed? "God proposed that the radium lettering be used...durability." Probably not God, but someone or some committee?

Also, just a small point, you used "as well as" which is perfectly acceptable. Rather than using it twice, I replaced the second instance with "and". Style thing. There is no right or wrong.

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#35661 Sat, 03 Jul 04 06:45 PM

Two display boards have been made for displaying the names of former Deans of the Schools and Heads of the Departments including their tenure.It.......

My question to mountainhiker!
Don't u think 'their respective periods' is better than 'the respective periods'

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#35670 Sat, 03 Jul 04 07:25 PM

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Agreed, good change.

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