Well, gentlemen, each one of you has a lot of energy to...

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Jackson6612

#464817 Wed, 16 Jan 08 08:41 AM

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Well, gentlemen, each one of you has a lot of energy to make this world a much better place to live. You just have to harness that energy out of you. See, you can harness the energy of calmly running water into electricity and irrigation. Utilize your potential.

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Mister Micawber

#464881 Wed, 16 Jan 08 11:23 AM

Well, gentlemen, each one of you has the energy to make this world a much better place to live in (or in which to live). You just have to harness that energy, as we can harness the energy of calmly running water and convert it into electricity or for irrigation. Realize your potential.

Mister Micawber

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'The question is,' said Humpty Dumpty, 'which is to be master-- that's all.'

Jackson6612

#464933 Wed, 16 Jan 08 12:52 PM

Thank you, MM.

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