Hi sweety,
Your essay was quite well written. You just had a few recurring mistakes like 'later marriage' and 'families poverty'.
Girls’ Education
The need
for education has been
felt all over the world in recent years. However, a large number of children in the world, especially in
sub-Saharan Africa, Southern Asia and the Arab States, do not attend school and approximately
60 percent* of these children are girls. This is because of many barriers that affect girls and do not let
them continue their education. Moreover, families’ poverty and early marriage or pregnancy affect
girls’ education. However, there are
solutions to these problems like
self-education and late marriage.
Poverty is the first barrier
to a girl’s education. Many families do not have enough money
to provide for an education, and
even if they have money, they might spend it
on selfish needs or on sustaining the family. However, they
cannot afford
schooling for the girls because they
either need new uniforms, or bags and books. Instead, they might let
boys go to school
to continue their education. They think that boys
take priority over girls for education because when they grow up, they probably will work and they can help the family. The second barrier is early marriage and pregnancy. Girls who
marry early
are not able to complete their studies since their husbands might not let them to do that. However, they
are not able to
juggle home life and their education. They might feel tired if they
have two difficult responsibilities. They probably will not concentrate well because they might think of the other things. So, it is difficult for them to do their best in their studies.
There are many solutions
to overcome these barriers. The first solution is self-education. Girls who
cannot complete their studies can read books and
newspapers.
In this way, they can increase their
knowledge [of…]. They can also grab any
chance to enhance their studies and lead them to succeed.
This might solve the poverty of families.
The second solution is
late marriage. Girls can continue their studies first and
marry later.
When completing their studies, women will get
a certificate which
will increase their chances of finding work. As a result, they can support their families and husbands in
indeed situations.
[What does indeed mean here?] They can provide economic needs for them. They can also let their children
be well educated by helping them in their homework and
explaining what they do not understand.
There are many
barriers to a girl’s education,
such as poverty, early marriage and pregnancy. However, self-education and
late marriage are
example solutions to these problems. In my opinion, women should
pursue an education because this will help the society to yield
an educated generation.
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