It was a warm afternoon; the sun was glittering in the blue sky just like a diamond. I closed my eyes and took a deep breath. And surprisingly, everything became different at that moment. I felt myself released from a heart prison and a powerful energy just ran into my mind. I was rebirth, and ready for the coming up challenges.
Hi,
Is it better to rewrite the bolded parts as "the sun was shining in the blue sky like a ball of fire" and "I felt I was released from my prison of heart, and then my heart was filled again with powerful energy. I was reborn, and I'm ready for the upcoming challenges?" Thanks.