Hi English Guru, I am pretty poor in English. Could someone please help
to comment & refine my letter below to the HR in a more gently way of expressing? (grammar mistakes and restructuring of
sentences) Many Thanks!!
Dear Human Resource,
Fist of all it is a great opportunity working for BAT for
the past 2 years and thank you for considering my transition from the project
team to support. There are few important points that I need to emphasize for
your understanding. Actually, it isn’t important for BAT to review my current
rate because RM6300 was an outdated 2 years ago charges and this rate was agreed
to only within a specific job requirement however I have work way above these requirements. I would like to confer in order for
both parties to reach a win-win agreement based on a conclusive justification.
From my investigation, I have approached people who work in
this particular industry (from a BW Project Manager, other BW Consultants and a
headhunter) commenting my current rate as a contractor for BW Consultant
specializing in Front End is really not at par with industry standard. On
top of that from what I am working now is beyond the agreed job scope, providing
services not only for Programming
but also BW
Support, BW R&D Development, Graphics,
Multimedia and also Training Management to all Asia Pacific regions. I
have contributed beyond the previous
agreed job requirements for all BAT Projects yet my current employer
dosen't know about this issue. These values contributing to the
organization will determine that I am worth more than I should.
I have fought for all project completion with success and
met all datelines, sometimes till midnight yet no overtime charges being paid. Therefore,
if the company were to bond my service for another one year or two, if the
organization gives nothing but just low remuneration (a net pay) to the
individual, what motivation is there to encourage the individual to give back
to the organization more than the simple completion of allotted work?
With all the justification mentioned above, I am looking for
mutual benefits for both, BAT and myself. What BAT concern, is to pay my rate
according to my skill set, 7 years of experience in IT sector and appropriate
rate based industry standards for contractors and I will do my best to
contribute my experience, talents, skills and abilities to the organization and
the team. An appropriate market rate will be RM400 to RM500 per day or RM8,500 per
month.
Yours Sincerely,
Vincent