Grammar check please

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Terr3

#372506 Wed, 30 May 07 11:24 AM

'When a new monster is created, a new hero introduced'.[br]

I'm struggling between 'hero introduced' or 'hero is introduced', please state why as well.
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And how is it different if "When a new monster created, a new hero is introduced"?

TY in advance

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Marius Hancu

#372512 Wed, 30 May 07 11:43 AM

You need parallelism between the constructions, thus is.

>When a new monster created

Bad English. It's like the monster created something ...

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Terr3

#372638 Wed, 30 May 07 04:27 PM

Thank you for the reply! It was on purpose to do it without parallelism, although I couldn't see w/out the 'is' ppl might take the meaning differently. i would be more appreciative if anyone can point out more specificly how should the statement be constructed...

-When a new monster is created, a new hero introduce(s?)

-When a new monster is created, a new hero is introduced

1 or 2? or there's a better choice and why?

ty