I need help with the grammar, especially with commas :)

Anonymous wrote:

Hi, tomorrow I must hand in my cover letter to my lecturer. Our task was to write a cover letter and a curriculum vitae. It was not very difficult to write there is maybe a problem with my grammar. I want to ask you whether you could check my grammar. Pleaseeeeeeeee -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Internship Marketing Dear Sir/Madam (unless you have a name), An employee of Berliner Flughaefen GmbH (Berlin Airports Association) told me that you offer an internship in the marketing department. As you can see in my CV I am a student at the International University of Applied Sciences *** , working toward my bachelor’s degree in ***. My university allows me the possibility to connect my theoretical knowledge with practical experience in the fifth semester. I would like to take the chance to perform my internship at the Berlin airports which I have used for many years to travel to and from my home district . I also would like to understand in practice the individual processes at the “System Airport”. Thanks to my part-time job as waiter at the state theatre ***, I have learned how to concentrate and focus on goals, but also that teamwork, thoroughness and commitment are important key elements for all kinds of work. Accordingly I see myself as a person who very highly values organisational skills and teamwork, and I believe that I fulfil tasks which are given to me very accurately. The enclosed curriculum vitae provides more details about my experiences and skills. If you consider that I would be a positive addition to your team, please feel free to call me or write me an email. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Soeren *** -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thanks a lot to everyone who will help me Thanks!!!!! Greeting Soeren