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Hi, guys. I'm not worried about facts here, rather grammar.

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Abstract

A continuous fight for comfort is the struggle of life, and humans alone are in the superior position. This, however, does not equate to superior comfort. The choices we make ultimately predetermine our lives, and knowledge, singularly, is the panacea of human afflictions. This paper will investigate the choices made regarding American prison systems and demonstrate their conflicts with knowledge in an effort to bring to light the injustice the mentally ill are forced to suffer. The investigation will then continue and trace the deleterious effect of these choices on society as a whole and explore how society copes with these choices.

 

Predisposed To Prison

Within the past century and a half humans have excelled rapidly. Many pieces of life’s puzzle have been put in place and the human brain is the vanguard of the movement. Neuroscience is a relatively new field of science which is devoted to the study of the nervous system and has already unraveled many age old questions. Psychology, the scientific study of behavior and mental processes (Myer’s, p. 5) is another relatively new field of science. It is a powerful tool that has enabled scientists to recognize different types of mental illness and their reciprocal relation between nature and nurture. The discovery of DNA (deoxyribonucleic acid) introduced genes to science and through subsequent discoveries the functionality of genes are being mapped. Despite all of these advancements in understanding, a large number of people are imprisoned for being mentally ill.

Approximately 16% or nearly 500,000 people in U.S. jails and prisons are diagnosed with mental illness (The new asylum, 2005) and require special attention. However, many of the nation’s psychiatric hospitals are shut down leaving prisons as the only viable option for the mentally ill. Most of these people have had no control over their conditions. Many of them are the victims of severe trauma, usually in their homes and especially in their childhood, while many others are as guilty as receiving their genes from their parents. This injustice is most obvious in the discriminatory handling of such individuals. It would sound absurd to imprison a person with a developing illness resulting in a physical disability, but this is exactly what is done to those who are mentally afflicted.

Neuroscience offers a necessary perspective into the erroneous logic of the prison. Neurons are the constituents of the entire nervous system which is composed of the central nervous system (CNS) and the peripheral nervous system (PNS). An individual neuron is a fairly simple cell which consists of a cell body, dendrites, and the axon with its terminals. Although there are different types of neurons, they all perform the same basic function. Dendrites extend from the cell body and receive messages through the intake of neurotransmitters from sensory receptors or other neurons. These messages are forwarded to the cell body where the decision making takes place. At this point the cell will react with an all or nothing response. If the cell is stimulated, it will release a brief electrical charge called the “action potential”. This charge travels down the neurons axon to the axon terminals and triggers the release of neurotransmitters which will traverse a microscopic space called the synaptic gap and bind to receptor sites on other neurons, glands, or muscles.

In other words; the external world that is conveyed through the five senses is nothing more than neurons sending and receiving neurotransmitters. All human perceptions, thoughts, actions, and reactions are the result of an extraordinary complex network of neurons; neurons are the captain of the ship that every man is. The human brain comprises approximately one hundred billion neurons. The development of the networks created within the brain is subject to many external factors, however. This is where the reciprocal relation between nature and nurture displays its force.

Among many, experiments done on rats by Mark Rosenzweig and David Krech (Myer’s p. 79) clearly show a difference between rats in isolation and rats in a social environment. The experiments performed demonstrate the importance of experience for brain development. Neurons from the brain of a rat in isolation lack the complexity that neurons of rats in a social environment possess. By simply isolating a rat from other rats, its brain development is stunned and becomes severely limited. So great is the significance of socialization for brain development that there is an observable difference in brain mass. Rats in a communal environment develop a heavier, thicker brain cortex. Also, there is a noticeable difference in behavior. It is possible to distinguish an impoverished rat from other rats by observing its activities and curiosity.

Mental trauma on the other hand not only limits the development of the brain, but also has the effect of causing “miswiring” of the brains networks. A mentally traumatized person’s perception of the world is abnormally formed. Their neurons are networked for survival in a traumatic environment. From a natural point of view survival is most important and when nurture forces nature to survive in extreme cases, extreme behaviors result. The problem becomes apparent when the environment changes and the traumatized individual is introduced to an environment which may not be as harsh to live in. This is usually the case when the individual reaches adulthood and this is where the real hardship just starts. In many cases children who are traumatized grow up to be criminals. Once they are adults society holds them responsible for their actions regardless of their past. They are then imprisoned and isolated. This is an ignorant approach which does not provide a solution.

People who have been traumatized or were born with a genetic problem resulting in mental illness are handicapped. They have very little or no control over their own actions. Their neurons are not networked properly. They do not have the same decision making power as the average man, and are susceptible to harming themselves or others. In short, they do not live in the same world as the rest of humans do.

Isolation has been the method of choice throughout history due to ease of implementation and more importantly the lack of understanding of the deleterious repercussions of this method. Isolation is not a remedy, rather the contrary. Social deprivation has many known adverse effects on the human psych and is another manner of traumatizing people. Weather behavioral problems among the human species are genetic, nature, or nurture related or some combination thereof, how these problems are dealt with should be the center of attention. Almost all prisoners are released back into the public. When the mentally ill are released into the public without proper help, they are bound to return to the prison to endure more isolation before the whole process is repeated.

The big picture which often is not realized is even more troubling; releasing mentally ill people who are unstable into the public leaves the public exposed to the risk of trauma. Although adults are not as vulnerable as children, trauma will still have its effect. For example, when a loved one is killed by a person who has not received the necessary medication or help to stabilize his or her condition, the loss is quite traumatic. Also, trauma has an accumulative nature which effects society as a whole through social interactions. Considering how destructive trauma can be to the human psych, by observing its symptoms directly from the traumatized, a vivid picture of the danger society is placed in is portrayed.

Conclusion

It is understanding that leads to the awareness that ignorance is not bliss, rather a tragedy. The wellbeing of any person highly depends on the environment that individual is in. Being mindful of others is a great way of creating a better environment. Circulating the mentally ill among the public is not conducive to the wellbeing of society. It is not possible to shield oneself from the suffering of others nor is it possible to ignore it. Humans are extremely social creatures, hence one mans suffering becomes every mans suffering. It is important to consider how humans network and how these networks connect people all around the world. Especially in this day and age, with the help of technology, there is such great diversity. People are able to move around more and everyone can somehow relate to everyone else.

It behooves every man for the sake of himself to look at those less fortunate and advocate their wellbeing also. Today, many types of handicap are acknowledged by society and much effort is expended in an effort to provide them with comfort and care, but those who are mentally ill are still ignored largely and current resolutions have predisposed them to prison. Investing on psychiatric hospitals should be a priority of this nation presently. Prisons are no substitute for psychiatric facilities and the care provided for the mentally ill in prisons is not adequate. Over all, a change in the system is needed and intelligent choices have to be made to accommodate these less fortunate people.

 

  
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Abstract

A continuous fight for comfort is the struggle of life, and humans alone are in the superior position. This, however, does not equate to superior comfort. The choices we make ultimately predetermine our lives, and knowledge, singularly, is the panacea of human afflictions. This paper will investigate the choices made regarding the American prison system and demonstrate its conflict with knowledge in an effort to bring to light the injustice the mentally ill are forced to suffer. The investigation will then continue and trace the deleterious effect of these choices on society as a whole and explore how society copes with these choices.

 

Predisposed To Prison

Within the past century and a half,  humans have excelled rapidly. Many pieces of life’s puzzle have been put in place and the human brain is the vanguard of the movement. Neuroscience is a relatively new field of science which is (delete) devoted to the study of the nervous system and has already unraveled many age-old questions. Psychology, the scientific study of behavior and mental processes,  (Myer’s, p. 5) is another relatively new field of science. It is a powerful tool that has enabled scientists to recognize different types of mental illness and their reciprocal relation between nature and nurture. The discovery of DNA (deoxyribonucleic acid) introduced genes to science and through subsequent discoveries, the functionality of genes is being mapped. Despite all of these advancements in understanding, a large number of people are imprisoned for being mentally ill.

Approximately 16%,  or nearly 500,000 people,  in U.S. jails and prisons are diagnosed with mental illness (The new asylum, 2005) and require special attention. However, many of the nation’s psychiatric hospitals are shut down,  leaving prisons as the only viable option for the mentally ill. Most of these people have had no control over their conditions. Many of them are the victims of severe trauma, usually in their homes and especially in their childhood, while many others are simply as guilty as receiving genes from their parents. This injustice is most obvious in the discriminatory handling of such individuals. It would sound absurd to imprison a person with a developing illness resulting in a physical disability, but this is exactly what is being done to those who are mentally afflicted.

Neuroscience offers a necessary perspective into the erroneous logic of the prison. Neurons are the constituents of the entire nervous system,  which is composed of the central nervous system (CNS) and the peripheral nervous system (PNS). An individual neuron is a fairly simple cell which consists of a cell body, dendrites, and the axon with its terminals. Although there are different types of neurons, they all perform the same basic function. Dendrites extend from the cell body and receive messages through the intake of neurotransmitters from sensory receptors or other neurons. These messages are forwarded to the cell body where the decision making takes place. At this point the cell will react with an all or nothing response. If the cell is stimulated, it will release a brief electrical charge called the “action potential”. This charge travels down the neurons axon to the axon terminals and triggers the release of neurotransmitters which will traverse a microscopic space, called the synaptic gap,  and bind to receptor sites on other neurons, glands, or muscles.

In other words; the external world conveyed through the five senses is nothing more than neurons sending and receiving neurotransmitters. All human perceptions, thoughts, actions, and reactions are the result of an extraordinary complex network of neurons; neurons are the captain of the ship that every man is sailing. The human brain comprises approximately one hundred billion neurons. However, the development of the networks created within the brain is subject to many external factors. This is where the reciprocal relation between nature and nurture displays its force.

Among many experiments, those conducted on rats by Mark Rosenzweig and David Krech (Myer’s p. 79) clearly show a difference between rats in isolation and rats in a social environment. The experiments performed demonstrate the importance of experience for brain development. Neurons from the brain of a rat in isolation lack the complexity of brain neurons in rats raised in a social environment.  By simply isolating a rat from other rats, its brain development is stunned and becomes severely limited. So great is the significance of socialization for brain development that there is an observable difference in brain mass. Rats in a communal environment develop a heavier, thicker brain cortex. Also, there is a noticeable difference in behavior. It is possible to distinguish an impoverished rat from other rats by observing its activities and curiosity.

Mental trauma,  on the other hand,  not only limits the development of the brain, but also has the effect of causing “miswiring” of the brain's networks. A mentally traumatized person’s perception of the world is abnormally formed. Their neurons are networked for survival in a traumatic environment. From a natural point of view,  survival is most important but when nurture forces nature to survive in extreme cases, extreme behaviors result. The problem becomes apparent when the environment changes and the traumatized individual is introduced to an environment which may not be as harsh to live in. This is usually the case when the individual reaches adulthood and is often when the real hardship begins. In many cases children who are traumatized grow up to be criminals. Once they are adults,  society holds them responsible for their actions regardless of their past. They are then imprisoned and isolated. This is an ignorant approach which does not provide a solution.

  
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