(1) Prior to 1964 when Clay converted to the Muslim religion and changed his name to Muhammad Ali, he seemed to fit comfortably enough within the context of establishment white values.
Is the phrase “of establishment white values.” ok? Please advise.
(2) The most famous and celebrated American athlete in the 1990s was Michael Jordan. Jordan would epitomize of the successful black athlete; his acceptance the culmination of the long struggle for racial equality by African Americans in the sports arena.
Is the phrase “Jordan would epitomize of the” ok? Please check.
(3) This mind-set has predictable consequences. A boxer doesn’t avoid injuries so much as endure them.
Is preposition missing in “so much as endure them.”? Please clarify.
(4) Oriard notes that each year almost a quarter of the NFL veterans fail to make the team.
Is preposition missing in “to make the team.” Please clarify.
(5) One gets the impression that a veritable cottage industry of self-proclaimed training experts has arisen to offer their services to athletes.
Should it be “have arisen”? Please advise.
(6) Salvino trained religiously for two hours a day over the course of some 40 years, and has the calluses to show for it.
Should it be religiously or rigorously? Please check.
(7) One of the more notorious incidents occurred in 1951 when the young Mickey Mantle’s spikes caught on a rubber cover over a sprinkler fixture in Yankee Stadium’s outfield, causing him to trip and tear ligaments in his knee.
Should it be “most notorious incidents”? Please clarify.
(8) The current uses of technology to shape, protect, and repair the athlete’s body stands in stark contrast to the days of Red Pollard and Ty Cobb.
Should it be “stand”? Please check.
(9) During a visit with my children’s maternal great grandfather, he reminisced from his Indiana nursing home bed how he had played football with the Olympic champion back in 1915 on Pine Village’s semipro team.
Should it be “During a visit to my”? Please check.
(10) I had to decide on which sports to include to represent the broad athletic experience.
Can “to represent” be changed to “in order to represent”? Please advise.
(11) The reader will learn more about father-son relationships through Earl Woods’ dreams for his son and the regimen he created to develop his young prodigy than from a description of Tiger sinking a 30-foot putt
Should it be “30-feet putt”? Please check.
(12) Moreover, athletes tend to block awareness of the pattern assumed by most all careers that depend on skilled performance: that there is an ascent, plateau, and descent.
Is the phrase “by most all careers” ok? Please check.
(13) Success leads to prestige on the local, state, and regional levels: name and picture on the sports page and on the local television channel, maybe even mention in national publications like Sports Illustrated.
Should it be “may be even mentioned”? Please clarify.
(14) They may unaware of the coach’s plan to cut them from the team.
Should it be “They may be unaware”? Please check.
(15) He batted .237 with 18 home runs in 1968. He was used as a sometimes first baseman to spare his beat-up legs while the fans continued to pay their tribute, but it made him uneasy.
Should it be “He was sometimes used as a first baseman”? Please clarify.
(16) At age 60, he could be found most every day on the Southern California courts teaching and getting ready for the next tournament.
Is the phrase “he could be found most every day” ok? Please check.
(17) Jackie Robinson retired at age 37 while he still was able to play competitively.
Should it be “while he was still able to play”? Please check.