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alc24  +  848660 Wed, 05 Aug 09 06:02 PM
hello, can someone check my corrections please

 

 

  • She's more at home than me, since its her mom that owns the place more than I
  • Beautiful/beautifully colored eyes    Beautifully colored eyes as in she has beautifully colored eyes
  • Pretty/prettily colored eyes   prettily colored
  • Weird/weirdly colored eyes  weirdly colored but its not said often
  • If i am to spend as much money on my parents as they did have on me i’d have to take them to dinner everyday until they died
  • out of all you're friends you like him the most even though he doesn't try hard to get you to like him, it's as if he didn't care about you/doesn't try hard for me to like him   1st one
  • out of all your supposed friends he's the one who tries the least to get you to like him, it's as if he didn't care  I'm not sure about this one
  • for everyday its overdue there's juice that adds to the debt   OK
  • depending on the answers i get from the different potential tenants I'll either give it to you or not/based on the answer.../according to the answers   depending on
  • everytime he moves out of an apartment and into another one he moves closer to the center of the city as if it's too hard to just take the leap and move their the first time   OK


 

 

 

 

thank you

 

 

alc

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Mr Wordy  +  849149 Thu, 06 Aug 09 02:13 AM

The word "I" is always capitalised. Sentences begin with a capital letter and end with a period (or question mark or exclamation mark).

 

Some of the commas I've suggested are not mandatory. I just feel they help make the sentences easier to parse. The fixing of the incorrectly punctuated run-on sentences is mandatory (in correct English).

 

She's more at home than me, since it's her mom that owns the place more than I. -- I suppose it's  possible someone could say this, but you have to ask yourself exactly what is meant by someone owning something "more than" someone else. "more than me" would be more common here in everyday English.

 

  • Beautiful/beautifully colored eyes -- "beautifully colored eyes" means the color of her eyes is beautiful. "beautiful colored eyes" (some people may prefer a comma after "beautiful") literally means that her eyes are both beautiful and colored, but in practice the fairly strong implication is that the colour is beautiful, so it ends up meaning something pretty similar.
  • Pretty/prettily colored eyes -- same as above.
  • Weird/weirdly colored eyes  -- same as above.
  • If I am to spend as much money on my parents as they did/have on me, I’d have to take them to dinner every day until they died. -- "did" and "have" are both possible. "did" implies that the parents' spending ended some time ago. "have" makes it sound more recent (or ongoing).
  • Out of all your friends you like him the most, even though he doesn't try hard to get you to like him. It's as if he didn't care about you/doesn't try hard for me to like him.
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  • Out of all your supposed friends, he's the one who tries the least to get you to like him. It's as if he didn't care.
  • For every day it's overdue there's juice that adds to the debt. -- I don't understand what you mean by "juice".
  • Depending on the answers I get from the different potential tenants, I'll either give it to you or not.
  • Every time he moves out of an apartment and into another one, he moves closer to the center of the city -- as if it's too hard to just take the leap and move there the first time.
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    alc24  +  849163 Thu, 06 Aug 09 02:28 AM
    for

     

  • Out of all your supposed friends, he's the one who tries the least to get you to like him. It's as if he didn't care.
  • can't it be

     

    ...who least tries to get you to like him

     

    or is the 1st better

     

    thank you

     

    Mr Wordy  +  849201 Thu, 06 Aug 09 03:12 AM
    alc24
    Out of all your supposed friends, he's the one who tries the least to get you to like him. It's as if he didn't care.

    can't it be

     

    ...who least tries to get you to like him

     

    or is the 1st better

     

    The second structure is gramatically possible ("...who least expects/wants/needs/deserves..."), but with the verb "tries" I prefer the first.

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