(1) So all too often, we find in situations of conflict that religion, instead of encouraging people to move beyond their own trauma and own fears, tends not only to support it, but even to exacerbate it and feed on in it.
So, all too often, we find in situations of conflict that religion, instead of encouraging people to move beyond their own trauma and own fears, tends not only to support it, but even to exacerbate it and feed in it.
The it's seem to refer to conflict. I think you should say 'them', and refer to the trauma and fears.
Please check comma usage.
(2) So, in the final analysis in this rather long, convoluted response to your question, I have no other answer other than the great gift that the Almighty have given us.
Should it be Almighty have or has? Please check S-V agreement. Say 'the Almighty has'.
(3) So, food is the biggest thing, and as human beings started living in the caves or whatever we have, << say this some other way in society as human beings [it is for food that they] then come out and then they go. So the world is constantly reappearing the way it is now.
Actually, this whole sentence needs rewording. I don't know what it means.
Please check comma usage.
(4) We begin to understand the being because the being is alive because it's craving for food.
Can "and" added before " and because it's craving for food." Please advise. Yes, you need 'and'. What does 'the being' mean?
(5) And monks in India were had no pockets at all. No keeping for tomorrow.<<< This is a phrase, not a sentence. Add a verb, etc. No food can be saved or stored for tomorrow.
Check your tenes. Do you want tu use all present tense?
Should it be wore rather than were? You don't 'wear'pockets.
(6) Other religions might advocate kindness to animals, either because they also are creatures of God, according to their theology, as some theistic religions might <<< might what?, or because they are the embodiment of the same spirit as us human beings, as Vedantins might explain, that all life is coming from the same source. You need to make this last part a separate sentence. You have too much information crammed into one sentence, and the grammar is getting messed up.
Can "as us" be substituted with "like us"? No. Please clarify.
(7) When you are to look at the number of cattle that are were slaughtered mercilessly in the wake of the Mad Cow Disease, or Mad Man Disease, whatever you call it, and nobody shed a tear about them. They were raised to die anyway.
'When' introduces a subordinate clause, but you have no main clause.
Should it be "They were raised"? If you want to talk about the past, yes.
(8) Sometimes we have been animals too, or even worse. For this reason, a being who today is an animal might once have been a human being, or by exercising moral powers, that some animal may be reborn in the future as a human being. You need to make this last part a separate sentence, and say it in a more understandable way.
Technically speaking, aren't people animals?
Should it be "that same animal"? Yes.
(9) You can think of a story here which you can be seen <<< what does this mean? on TV. A beautiful story about an elephant, narrated in the Jaina scriptures, illustrates the moral capacity ascribed to higher animals by the Jains.
Should it be "which you can see it on the TV's" Still wrong. perhaps you mean 'which you can see on TV'?
(10) And this is a story which is based on the sacred texts. And in this story appears in the canonical Bhagavati Sutra, which purports to preserve the words of the last tirthakara Mahavira
Should it be " And this story appears"
(11) There, Mahavira is asked about the war between the king of Magadha and some independent kings, which it is now agreed was a historical event, a war in which 48,000 people died.
Should it be "which is now agreed" Yes
(12) Thanks you very much or Thank you very much
Please advise which one is correct (Thanks or Thank).
Best wishes, Clive