Hi, I would just like someone to validate these 3 paragraphs for grammatical correctness...
This dynamic, highly sought after system, will be
primarily geared towards helping Clem’s Real Estate business achieve, some
highly desired, radical new expansion. The system will enable Clem and his team
to streamline and collate virtually all aspects of the business into one
tightly wrapped, neat little package. It is expected that, with the aid of the
new system, productivity will be on the rise while overall organization will be
taken to a whole new realm. A new breed of client is on the way with the plans
for a website.
Currently the business offers
residential property that is either for sale or for rent. This includes
apartments, units & houses. The business also caters for an administration
service for body corporate management of apartments and units. As its stands,
Clem has a total of 4 agents working for him, with 2 agencies in Victoria, but
with the view for expansion in mind, this could all very well change. Clem
& his team constantly deal with contracts between tenant, vendor &
landlord, a long with other sundry forms of office paper work such as invoices
– namely for body corporate management.
At the moment the business is using Microsoft Word &
Excel to handle basically all aspects of the operation. It is not the
intentions of the system to redefine the way in which the business is run, but
rather to concentrate on streamlining the operation so that the business can
perform more efficiently. It is expected that the website will be beneficial in
providing many new client leads, and at the same time be responsible for
improved, existing customer satisfaction. People will be given a “birds eye”
view of the properties on the site a long with descriptions that will result in
a more informed client at the start. Agents may indeed find themselves spending
much less time with inspections as a result.
Out of 10?