I'll be very grateful if any one could please help me correcting this letter

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monish07  #532048  Tue, 24 Jun 08 09:58 PM
please some one help me to write a perfect request letter,please correct all the necessary sentences
 
 To,
     The center head
      AA institute
Sub:(compensation of classes and attendance)

Respected Sir,
                    I request you to kindly compensate the lessons and
attendance as I was absent from dt.17.06.08 to dt.20.06.08 & dt.23.06.08
to dt.24.06.08 due to my grandfather's ill & serious conditions in the hospital,
I was unable applying a leave letter.
                   So,I am requesting you to kindly allow me joining my lessons,
For which I'll be grateful to you.
Thanking you,
Yours  obediently
  
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Mr Wordy  #532382  Wed, 25 Jun 08 03:12 PM
 To,

     The Center Head
      AA Institute
Sub:(compensation of classes and attendance) Re: class attendance and refund

Respected Dear Sir,
                   
I request you to kindly compensate the lessons and
attendance as I was absent from dt.17.06.08 to dt.20.06.08 & dt.23.06.08
to dt.24.06.08 due to my grandfather's ill & serious conditions in the hospital
,

I was unable to attend lessons from 17.06.08 to 23.06.08 and 23.06.08 to 24.06.08 due to my grandfather's serious illness. I would like to request a refund for these dates.

I'm assuming that "compensate the lessons" means that you want a refund of the money you paid?

I was unable applying a leave letter.

I don't understand what this means well enough to be able to correct it with any confidence. It could mean "I was unable to let you know in advance", or something like that...

So,I am requesting you to kindly allow me joining my lessons, For which I'll be grateful to you.

I don't understand what this means. Are you asking to be allowed to rejoin the classes?

Thanking you,
Yours  obediently

"Yous obediently" is old-fashioned and pompous.

  
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monish07  #532590  Wed, 25 Jun 08 11:37 PM
thank u 4 ur help thank you very much

 To,

     The Center Head
      AA Institute
Sub:(compensation of classes and attendance) Re: class attendance and refund what will be the request here

Dear Sir,
 

I was unable to attend lessons from 17.06.08 to 23.06.08 and 23.06.08 to 24.06.08 due to my grandfather's serious illness. I would like to request a refund for these dates.

I'm assuming that "compensate the lessons" means that you want a refund of the money you paid?

Actually I was trying to ask "the classes or lessons I missed during my absent days should be taught","which i mean as compensation lessons"

I was unable to let you know in advance

So,I am requesting you to kindly allow me joining my lessons, For which I'll be grateful to you.

I don't understand what this means. Are you asking to be allowed to rejoin the classes? yes exactly,so what will be the sentence here

Thanking you,
Yours  obediently
  as I'm a student what to write here

  
Mr Wordy  #532612  Thu, 26 Jun 08 12:58 AM
 To,

     The Center Head
      AA Institute
Sub:(compensation of classes and attendance)
Re: class attendance and refund what will be the request here

I'm not sure what words you should use here. See below.


Dear Sir,

I was unable to attend lessons from 17.06.08 to 23.06.08 and 23.06.08 to 24.06.08 due to my grandfather's serious illness. I would like to request a refund for these dates.

I'm assuming that "compensate the lessons" means that you want a refund of the money you paid?

Actually I was trying to ask "the classes or lessons I missed during my absent days should be taught","which i mean as compensation lessons"

The thing that you say you're asking is not actually a question. Do you want to know if/when the lessons will be repeated? Or are you asking if the teacher can give the lessons again specially to you, so that you can catch up? Or something else?

I was unable to let you know in advance

So,I am requesting you to kindly allow me joining my lessons, For which I'll be grateful to you.

I don't understand what this means. Are you asking to be allowed to rejoin the classes? yes exactly,so what will be the sentence here

I'm not sure. I don't understand whether this "rejoining" is a separate issue from them classes you missed, or if it's somehow related. If it's related then I don't understand how it's related. Why do you need to "rejoin"? If you just mean that your circumstances now allow you to attend again, then can't you just go to the classes as normal?

Sorry I'm not being much help! I'm having difficulty understanding what you're trying to say.

Thanking you,
Yours  obediently
  as I'm a student what to write here

You don't need to say anything here. "Thanking you" (or "Thank you") is sufficient. However, if the person you're writing to doesn't know who you are, then at the start of the letter you should say something like:

Dear Sir, I am/was a student at Mr X's classes in <subject>. I was unable to attend lessons from ... etc.

  
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