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Qamanda  #339989  Fri, 16 Mar 07 04:06 PM
I have only the introduction written and here is the topic.
Terrorism has long been described as an international problem which is the most difficult problem to deal with. Write an article, stating the problems of the worsened situation and trying to suggest ways to promote international relationship.

Here is my written work:

The terrorist attack in 911 already revealed the fact that international terrorism had revolutionised the status of all countries and exerted a controversial topic over the world. We should bear in mind that we can not turn a blind eye to it, but we had better find out the source of the problem and pratically figure out a solution for it.

Please feel free to make a comment on it and I will do my best to improve.
  
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Feebs11  #340071  Fri, 16 Mar 07 08:28 PM
 Qamanda wrote:
I have only the introduction written and here is the topic.
Terrorism has long been described as an international problem which is the most difficult problem to deal with. Write an article, stating the problems of the worsened situation and trying to suggest ways to promote international relationship.

Here is my written work:

The terrorist attack on 9/11 already [I would remove this - you will find the sentence makes better sense without it] revealed the fact that international terrorism had revolutionised the status of all countries and exerted a controversial topic over the world[not quite sure what you mean by this - do you mean "introduced a controversial topic for the whole world"?] . We should bear in mind that we can not turn a blind eye to it, but we had better find out the source of the problem and pratically figure out a solution for it.

Please feel free to make a comment on it and I will do my best to improve.
  
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