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nchines

#23438 Tue, 24 Feb 04 08:51 PM

Help with punctuation of sentence

The wound was cauterized with the Bovie however blood continued to ooze from the lateral edge

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rommie

#23569 Wed, 25 Feb 04 01:53 PM

Go on ... make the attempt. You know you want to.

Don't worry, we'll tell you how close you got. We're a friendly bunch here, but do have a bash yourself first.

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#23689 Thu, 26 Feb 04 05:46 PM

She was an angry appearing female; who was crying, screaming, and kicking.

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rommie

#23693 Thu, 26 Feb 04 06:55 PM

Pretty good, but the semicolon there is inappropriate, since the second clause is an essential part of the description of the female. Also, it would be more common to put "angry looking" rather than "angry appearing". so you could go with "She was an angry looking female who was crying, screaming, and kicking." Even smoother would be "She was an angry looking female, crying, screaming and kicking", which has more punch somehow.

Hope that helps.
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idiar

#23704 Thu, 26 Feb 04 08:14 PM

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#23705 Thu, 26 Feb 04 08:14 PM

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