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#348342 Sun, 08 Apr 07 12:52 PM

Hello there,

I have a few questions here, please help me with it. Thanks so much.

1) Is the sentence below concise? especially the use of "together with", can I use "and" instead and still maintain clarity?

My interest in research together with my communication and analytical skills qualify me for the position.

2) Does the sentence below tells you clearly that the adjective "sales" applies to managers and executives as well?

I conducted training for sales directors, managers and executives.

3) Similarly, does the sentence below tells you clearly that "skills" is applied to "running" and "jumping" as well?

My running, jumping and swimming skills are good.

4) Also, does the sentence below tell you clearly that all the activities were carried out in IT projects?

Managed relationships with clients and business partners, resolved differences, and aligned goals in IT projects

Anonymous

Mister Micawber

#348358 Sun, 08 Apr 07 01:59 PM

1) Is the sentence below concise? especially the use of "together with", can I use "and" instead and still maintain clarity? -- I like 'together with' better; it is clearer and more meaningful. 'And' is a little awkward.

2) Does the sentence below tells you clearly that the adjective "sales" applies to managers and executives as well? -- No, not clearly. How about something like: 'I conducted training for sales personnel: directors, managers and executives.'

3) Similarly, does the sentence below tells you clearly that "skills" is applied to "running" and "jumping" as well? -- Yes. (Strange job you're applying for!)

4) Also, does the sentence below tell you clearly that all the activities were carried out in IT projects? -- No; try-- 'For IT projects, managed relationships with clients and business partners, resolved differences, and aligned goals.'

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Anonymous

#348379 Sun, 08 Apr 07 03:42 PM

Thanks much for your help.

kinda suspected that they aren't perfectly clear. however, in the context of resume, can we make do with it since brevity is more important and we can safely assume the reader can understand it?

Anonymous

Resume

Cogar

#348420 Sun, 08 Apr 07 05:32 PM

hello,

thanks so much for your help.

i had kinda guessed that its not perfectly clear. however, since brevity is more important in resume writing, can we assume that the reader will understand, given the context.

Cogar