Hi,
This seems OK to me. I've offered a couple of suggestions.
Good luck, Clive
Greetings,
My name is (Pastor's name) and I am the pastor of (name of church). God is taking my ministry to another level. I have been a minister (to avoid repeating the word 'ministry) for 25 years and have sat under the leadership of my father. My mission is to spread the word of God and to win souls for Christ.
I am currently seeking financial sponsors to help with the beginning stage of this ministry. Your financial support will go toward the building of God's Kingdom. This ministry will also assist and serve the surrounding communities. Do you need to say what they are?
Please feel free to contact me at ( ) if you need more information. Your generous contribution will be a blessing to the ministry and in return you shall also be blessed. Thank you in advance for your consideration and support.
Do you need to say how contributions should be made?
Thank You,
(Pastor)