hitchhiker  +  697915 Wed, 15 Apr 09 07:56 PM No secret here, my English is terrible. I'm writing up the BIO for this website you may have heard of.. Corrections would be appreciated, thanks to all! ------------------ Englishforums.com was founded in November of 2002 and hasn't stopped growing since. It is now the world's largest EFL / TEFL social network community, striving to help people learn the English language. We pride ourselves on having developed a friendly and non-confrontational environment. Englishforums owes it's success to a team of experienced teachers, moderators and volunteers. ------------------ hitchhiker Joined on Mon, Nov 18 2002 Richmond, UK Senior Member 4,036 Usenet is like a herd of performing elephants with diarrhea - massive, difficult to redirect, awe-inspiring, entertaining, and a source of mind-boggling amounts of excrement... TEFL, Jobs, Countries, United Kingdom, Great Britain, Online, Websites, Careers, Teaching, Qualifications, Languages

	Grammar Geek  +  697916 Wed, 15 Apr 09 08:07 PM Here's my go:   Englishforums.com was founded in November 2002 and has been growing ever since. It is now the world's largest EFL / TEFL social network community, providing a supportive and friendly environment in which people can learn, practice, and master the English language. We pride ourselves on the welcoming and non-confrontational environment in our forums. Englishforums owes its success to a team of experienced teachers, moderators, and volunteers, and to the thousands of users who have made it their English-learning home and become members.     Next up? Grammar Geek Joined on Tue, Jan 10 2006 Veteran Member 19,667 Barbara, who answers in American English. My housekeeping skills attest to the truth of the second law of thermodynamics: Left to themselves, things get more and more random! TEFL, Jobs, Countries, United Kingdom, Great Britain, Careers, Teaching, Qualifications, Languages

	AlpheccaStars  +  697920 Wed, 15 Apr 09 08:24 PM Well, my only comment is on the switch to 1st person from 3rd person in the 1st sentence, second paragraph. It would be better to write it consistently in 3rd person or, for more personal and friendly tone, in 1st person. If you all agree, I would make a stab at a re-write... AlpheccaStars Joined on Sun, Oct 12 2008 Senior Member 3,508 The pen is mightier than the sword. Edward Bulwer-Lytton (1803-1873) Paragraphs, Writing, Sentences

	Grammar Geek  +  697942 Wed, 15 Apr 09 09:22 PM Yup  that makes sense to me. I prefer 1st person - what about you, Hitch? "we" or "it"?   Grammar Geek

	hitchhiker  +  698135 Thu, 16 Apr 09 12:26 PM It's for the englishforums 'user' - so I guess: Englishforums.com was founded in November 2002 and has been growing ever since. It's now the world's largest EFL / TEFL social network community, providing a supportive and friendly environment in which people can learn, practice, and master the English language. The goal being to provide a welcoming and non-confrontational learning environment for new and experienced students alike. Englishforums owes its success to a team of experienced teachers, moderators, and volunteers, and to the thousands of users who have made it their English-learning home. ------- Second para / 1st sentence seems awkward.. I'm trying to start with something other than 'It' or EF Next? hitchhiker TEFL, Sentences, Jobs, Countries, United Kingdom, Great Britain, Students, Careers, Teaching, Qualifications, Languages

	AlpheccaStars  +  698199 Thu, 16 Apr 09 04:48 PM Here's my contribution. I removed the redundancy in the first and second paragraphs, and puffed it up a bit. Englishforums.com was founded in November 2002 and has been growing ever since. It's now the world's largest EFL / TEFL social network community, providing a welcoming, supportive,  non-confrontational and friendly environment in which people learn, practice, and master the English language. Englishforums owes its unqualified success to a dedicated team of experienced teachers, moderators and volunteers, as well as the thousands of users who visit the site every day and have made it their English-learning home. AlpheccaStars Paragraphs, TEFL, Writing, Jobs, Countries, United Kingdom, Great Britain, Careers, Teaching, Qualifications, Languages

	hitchhiker  +  698260 Thu, 16 Apr 09 08:08 PM Excellent.. Did a mid-way-version: http://www.englishforums.com/user/nnbh/profile.htm Thanks all! Frank. hitchhiker