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Anonymous  #175323  Tue, 27 Dec 05 08:29 PM

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Drug Addiction in UAE

For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction.  The statistics of Anti-Narcotics Department of the Ministry of Interior, published by Al Amn — the official magazine of Dubai Police, showed that, “More than 113 individuals were charged in 63 drug cases in the UAE in July 2004” (113 charged in 63 drug cases in July,2004).  The statistic showed that 33 % of addicted people were UAE nationals and some of them were for drug using and drug spreading.  Therefore, this serious problem needs to be solved as soon as possible for the good of the society. As a solution to this problem, I propose that our youth are presented with awareness lectures on how drugs are bad and how they affect people badly.

            The causes and effects of this phenomenon are different from person to person. Family problems, pressures, and lack of their involvement can lead some people to become addict to drugs.  Drugs lets people feel that they are in different world and they forget what is happening around them.  Others might become addict to drugs due to media.  Media nowadays is playing a big role in people life.  Many movies and programs describe how to take drugs.  Also some movies shows that drugs are a good thing and it let people forget what is around them.  Which all that are wrong.  According to “Proposals to curb drug abuse(2004)”, research done by Aysha Ibrahim Al Buraimi of the Police Research Centre at the General Directorate of Sharjah Police, “ the majority of students answered the questionnaire on how they knew of drugs by saying it was through the media”.  Other causes for addicting drugs would be having bad friends.  Friends are very important to everybody and they also the easy way to get affect from them.  Having bad friends can lead to imitate them even if it was in long term. Some addicted people die because of the drugs. The effects of drugs can cause to have bad disease such as AIDS and Cancer.  The disease among addicted people spread due to use of drugs injections several time and in polluted place.

            Awareness lectures are best solutions for this problem.  Police department of the city should prepare awareness lectures in general places such as theatres and in private places such as schools. These lectures should explain what drugs are, how it affects people, and what laws government put to punish who deal with drug. In my opinion, this solution can benefit people because preventing people from it is better than treating it.

            Some might argue that putting strong laws is better than awareness lectures.  Laws can prevent people to deal with drugs because they will be afraid if they caught by police people. This suggestion might be true but it's not an ideal solution.  That because it might graduate people who will be worse than before. These laws might not suit all kind of people which might let them to do thing worse than addicting drugs when they come out.  Therefore, spreading awareness lectures of how bad drugs are can eliminate the number of people who will addict drugs.

            Drugs are some of the problems that comes because of the rapid development of the country. It has many causes such as the effect of media and bad friend.  Moreover, it causes very bad effects on people such as diseases and dies. Preventing people from it by spreading awareness lectures can solve the problem.

 

  
davkett  #175559  Wed, 28 Dec 05 04:28 PM

(Congratulations.  This is very good writing for a beginner.  But here are some revisions for you to consider.)

Drug Addiction in UAE

For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction.  The statistics of Anti-Narcotics Department of the Ministry of Interior, published by Al Amn — the official magazine of Dubai Police, showed that, “More than 113 individuals were charged in 63 drug cases in the UAE in July 2004” (113 charged in 63 drug cases in July,2004).  The statistics showed that 33 % of addicted people were UAE nationals, some of which were charged with drug use, others with drug peddling.  Therefore, this serious problem needs to be solved as soon as possible for the good of the society. As a solution to this problem, I propose that our youth be presented with awareness lectures on the dangers of addictive drugs.

            The causes and effects of this phenomenon are different from person to person. Family problems, pressures, and lack of involvement can lead some people to become addicted to drugs.  Drugs cause people to feel that they are in a different world where they forget what is happening around them.  The media is playing a big role in people's lives today.  Many movies and television programs describe how to take drugs.  Some movies show that drugs are a good thing allowing people to forget what is around them.  All of which is wrong.  According to “Proposals to Curb Drug Abuse(2004)”, research done by Aysha Ibrahim Al Buraimi of the Police Research Centre at the General Directorate of Sharjah Police, “ the majority of students answered the questionnaire on how they knew of drugs by saying it was through the media”.  Another cause for addiction to drugs is having bad friends.  Friends are very important, and it is easy to be affected by them.   Having bad friends can lead to imitating them even if it takes a long timeDrugs can cause diseases such as AIDS and cancer.  Diseases among addicts spread because of injections with previously used and polluted needles. Some addicts die because of the drugs.

            Awareness lectures are the best solution to this problem.  Police departments of the city should present awareness lectures in public places such as theatres, and in private places such as schools. These lectures should explain what drugs are, how they affect people, and what laws cover the punishment of drug crimes.  In my opinion, this solution can benefit people because preventing people from using drugs is better than treating them for drug abuse.

            Some might argue that passing strong laws is better than awareness lectures.  Laws can prevent people from dealing with drugs because they will be afraid of getting caught by the police. This suggestion might be true, but it's not an ideal solution because it might graduate people who will be worse than before. These laws might not suit all kind of people which might let them to do thing worse than addicting drugs when they come out. (I think what you are trying to say here is that after a convicted criminal serves his time in prison, he may not be rehabilitated, and might go back out on the street worse than before.) Therefore, awareness lectures can reduce the number of people who become addicts.

            Drug abuse is one of the problems that comes from rapid modernization in our country.  It has many causes such as the influence of the media and bad friends.  Moreover, it causes very bad effects such as disease and death.  Preventing drug addiction by awareness lectures can help in solving the problem.

 

  
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