Hi, here is my draft, please check it and let me know where is the mistake and what is the right sentence to use.

Good morning, my name is Hampeh Betul. Graduated from Harvard University in 2000 in Computer Engineering. I started my career as Network Administrator in government agencies for 5 years. In ABC Agencies, i did a lot of work related to System and network administration. I had experience in handling Windows, Sun Solaris, and HP-UX.

After that, I was offered by one private agencies to manage network security devices such as firewalls, IDSes and Anti Viruses for largest Construction Company, DEF Corporation.

3 years later, I was offered by another Auditing Firm as a Security Auditor. Here, I’m doing lot of work related to Network Security Audit, Web Security Assessment and Penetration Test.

That was the little introduction about me. Thank you.
hmm...how about that. Is it too short? Or should I add anything else?
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Good morning,

My name is Hampeh Betul. I was graduated from Harvard University in 2000 in Computer Engineering. I started my career as network administrator in government agencies give name if possible for five years. I did a lot of work related to system and network administration in ABC Agencies. I had experience in handling Windows, Sun Solaris, and HP-UX.

After that Later, I was offered by one of the private agencies managing network security devices such as Firewalls, IDSes and Anti Viruses for the largest construction company, DEF Corporation. Three years later, I was offered by another auditing firm as a security auditor and I’m doing lot of work related to Network Security Audit, Web Security Assessment and Penetration Test for now.
hmm...how about that. Is it too short? Or should I add anything else?---Don't know really baby.
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