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I need help with this sentence.
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Anonymous  #279036  Wed, 11 Oct 06 10:35 AM
Hi. I really need help with this sentence. I need this sentence to make a very strong point.

Sentence:
I wouldn’t classify perfectionism to be a weakness, but rather as one of my strengths.

Should the wording change? Is the word rather use correctly?

Thank you so much.
  
Mister Micawber  #279114  Wed, 11 Oct 06 02:06 PM

Your sentence is marginal.  I would change it at least to:

I wouldn’t classify perfectionism as a weakness, but rather as one of my strengths.


  
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Anonymous  #279538  Thu, 12 Oct 06 09:51 AM
I would not call perfectionism a weakness, but a strength.

OR

I would rather call perfectionism as one of my strengths and not weakness.
  
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