I need help please (topic: introduction of myself)

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Hi, my name is John. My grand mother gave me this name. She took it from the bible.

She hopes me that be a religious man. So did my parents. I went to church when I wasn’t born yet. My mom told me I liked the church very much.

I am from South Korea. I was born at 1982, December. So I like December, snow, skiing and everything that related with December.

I am the oldest one in my family. I have one brother and sister. My brother is in Korean and my sister is in Montreal. I graduated from Montreal and I moved to here Toronto. I love them very much. They are my everything. I want to be a great old brother.

My favorite things to do are watching movies and collecting DVD movies.

So I like to go HMV, and finding the movies that I want to collect and listen the music and drinking coffees. Sometime it take 2 hours or more. I wanted to be producer but I relies that I don’t have much talent on writing the stories.

But I like to imagine. I like to take pictures and chat on the internet. But I don’t spend much time on this because sometimes I just spend it too much on it.

Well, I live here alone, for now I live in my cousin house. But soon next year my father is buying me a condominium.

Personally I don’t like much Toronto, because it’s too windy and too big. so it’s too hard for whom don’t have car. The transportation is not set up well here compare to Montreal. Montreal is beautiful city fashioned, international, small, easy accessibility and people are friendly.

But we speak French and English. We like English people, any people, but English people don’t like us very much.

I was once in the group where a lot of other people were united. It was big groups united for pictures collections. Everybody had their own skill own fashion to take pictures. I was in the French group and there was English group too. I was 15 years old. Suddenly there was fight, without the reason but racisms between English and French. Since that time I don’t prefer to speak French.

Anyway, Montreal is a good city to travel. We say it’s the second beautiful city in Canada and eighth in the world. And we have lots of beautiful girls too.

I practice Acupuncture. After I graduated from high school, I went to Cegep, and went to first year university. But I drop out from university and went to College to learn 3years program Acupuncturist or we call it O.M.Dr. (Oriental Medicine Doctor). I am doing the one year internship in order to get the licensed from city hall. We have lots of argument going on about acupuncture regulations. Soon it will be regulated and there is rumor saying that U of T is making Acupuncture courses as degree programs. And I am sure that Ryerson is making it right now.

Well that’s about my story. I hope you learned enough about me nice to meet you. Thank you.

John
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Hi, my name is John. My grandmother gave me this name which she took from the bible.

She hopes that I will be a religious man. So did (do your parents still hope you will be religious? If so it should be 'so do') my parents. I went to church even before I was born. My mom told me that I liked church very much.

I am from South Korea. I was born in December 1982. I like December, I like snow, skiing and everything that is related with December.

I am the oldest one in my family. I have one brother and sister. My brother is in Korea and my sister is in Montreal. I graduated from Montreal and I moved to here Toronto. I love my brother and sister very much. They are everything to me, I want to be a great old brother.

My favorite things to do are watching movies and collecting DVD movies.

So I like to go HMV?, and finding the movies that I want to collect, listen the music and drinking coffee. Sometime it takes 2 hours or more. I would have liked to be producer but I realise that I don’t have much talent in writing stories.

But I like to imagine. I like to take pictures and chat on the internet. But I don’t spend much time on this because sometimes I just spend it too much on it. (this sentence contradicts itself, do you spend much time on the internet or not?)

For now I live alone in my cousins house, but next year my father is buying me a condominium.

Personally I don’t like Toronto much, because it’s too windy and too big. It is also too hard for people who don’t have car. The transportation is not set up well here compare to Montreal. Montreal is a beautiful fashioned city, international, small, easy accessibility and people are friendly.

But we (who is 'we' should it be 'I'?) speak French and English. We like English people, any people, but English people don’t like us(who is 'us'?) very much.

I was once in the group where a lot of other people were united. It was big groups united for pictures collections. Everybody had their own skill own fashion to take pictures. I was in the French group and there was English group too. I was 15 years old. Suddenly there was fight, without the reason but racisms between English and French. Since that time I don’t prefer to speak French. ( This sentence is unclear and I do not have the time to work it out now, what do you mean by people were united?)

Anyway, Montreal is a good city in which to travel. We say it’s the second most beautiful city in Canada and eighth in the world. And we have lots of beautiful girls too.

I practice Acupuncture. After I graduated from high school, I went to Cegep, and went to first year university. But I droped out of university and went to College to do a 3year program to become a Acupuncturist or we call it O.M.Dr. (Oriental Medicine Doctor). I am doing the one year internship in order to get the license from city hall. We have lots of arguments about acupuncture regulations. Soon it will be regulated and there is rumor saying that U of T is making Acupuncture courses as degree programs. And I am sure that Ryerson is making it right now.

Well that’s about my story. I hope you learned enough about me, nice to meet you. Thank you.

John
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Anonymous:
Hi, my name is pathivarnan. my grandfather gave me this name which he took form the internet.

he hopes that i will be a good boy. my mom told me that i liked temple very much. i am form sri lanka. i was born in june 1988. i like june. i am the oldest one in my family. I have one brother and three sister. my brother is in canada ,1st sister is in landon,2nd sister is in canada and 3th sister is in india.

I love my brother and sister very much.They are everything to me,l want to be a great old brother.

My favourite things to do are watching movies and playing cricket. so I like to go play ground.
Anonymous:
my name is pathi. My grand mother gave me this name. She took it from the bible. She hopes me that be a religious man. So did my parents. I went to church when I wasn’t born yet. My mom told me I liked the church very much. I am from sri lanka. I was born at 1988, june. So I like june, snow, skiing and everything that related with December. I am the oldest one in my family. I have one brother and three sister. My brother is in canada and my sister is in Montreal. I graduated from srilanka and I moved to here india. I love them very much. They are my everything. I want to be a great old brother. My favorite things to do are watching movies and collecting DVD movies.So I like to go HMV, and finding the movies that I want to collect and listen the music and drinking coffees. Sometime it take 2 hours or more. I wanted to be producer but I relies that I don’t have much talent on writing the stories.But I like to imagine. I like to take pictures and chat on the internet. But I don’t spend much time on this because sometimes I just spend it too much on it.Well, I live here alone, for now I live in my cousin house. But soon next year my father is buying me a condominium. Personally I don’t like much india, because it’s too windy and too big. so it’s too hard for whom don’t have car. The transportation is not set up well here compare to india. india is beautiful city fashioned, international, small, easy accessibility and people are friendly.But we speak Tamil and English. We like English people, any people, but English people don’t like us very much.I was once in the group where a lot of other people were united. It was big groups united for pictures collections. Everybody had their own skill own fashion to take pictures. I was in the Tamil group and there was English group too. I was 15 years old. Suddenly there was fight, without the reason but racisms between English and Tamil. Since that time I don’t prefer to speak tamil. Anyway, india is a good city to travel. We say it’s the second beautiful city in Canada and eighth in the world. And we have lots of beautiful girls too. I practice Acupuncture. After I graduated from high school, I went to Cegep, and went to first year university. But I drop out from university and went to College to learn 3years program Acupuncturist or we call it O.M.Dr. (Oriental Medicine Doctor). I am doing the one year internship in order to get the licensed from city hall. We have lots of argument going on about acupuncture regulations. Soon it will be regulated and there is rumor saying that U of T is making Acupuncture courses as degree programs. And I am sure that Ryerson is making it right now. Well that’s about my story. I hope you learned enough about me nice to meet you. Thank you.
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