an important letter for my futer, thanks for u're help ;-)

hi

please take a look at my motivation letter. thanks a million ;-)

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Dear sir or madam

I am writing to apply for the International Master's program with the intension of showing my interest and motivation in being admitted in this master.

My aim is to work in an international field of work related to communication. Therefore I want to gain a deeper empirical knowledge in communication networks as well as improve my personal skills. I am so impressed by the international climate of the *** school and attracted when I visited the *** university's web site and discovered the numerous cultural activities that it provides for its students.

I completed my Bachelor of science degree in “computer science applied for management” which is the translation of the French appelation: “informatique appliqué à la gestion” at the faculty of Economic Sciences and Management which belongs to the University of ***.

In my school times I had already enjoyed so much empirical tasks and I had always felt at ease when I was involving in practical and concrete projects, as a result I had had many opportunities to participate in the achievement of such a projects.

Furthermore, to prepare my self and to demonstrate my interest in this master, I have been taking additional English courses at *** since September of the last year and now I am  preparing the TOEFL exam which I am going to take on August 26 th, thus an email will be sent to you on ***@hkkl.co 15 business days later. In addition I took Italian language classes at the ‘Istituito Italiano di Cultura’, as well as I participated in some cultural events such as: attending Italian fashion days and informational days about studying in Italy at the institute, showing interesting concerts, balais and movies at the "Théatre municipale" as I always would like to discover new cultures, especially Mediterranean cultures and above all Italian and old roman culture, I do not know exactly why, but I do,  in fact I always feel too close to the Italian culture. Moreover, some members of my family have a good relationship with an Italian family, they both share a textile business and I used to work with them during the summer. Furthermore, I also enjoy management and organization tasks in my free time that will be I think a good combination between management and technical skills. In fact, as a member of AIESEC*, I learned how to organize seminars and congress and how to conduct discussion forums and presentations. I think this experience will help me very much , especially when working in a global environment like nowadays. In this respect I also want to mention that I am someone who is hard working, reliable, very organized and open mind.

In addition, and inspired by my eager for working I did two internships, which are not obligatory, so for to gain additional practical experience .I tremendously enjoyed my experience working at CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique) where my last studies project was done. I choose it to be as close as possible to communication and network field (or fields). It was really a terrific experience, because there I had the opportunity to take part in an interesting project with a very qualified team.

In summary, both internships have provided me with a deeper insight to the subject of my studies.

Also, I am convinced that the *** school has an excellent reputation in this kind of program. In fact it is one of the best specialized schools in Italy. I have already visited the master website at http://*** and took a deep view on the course program, really I found it the most suitable for my aptitudes and desires.                                                                                                  

   yours sincerely

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have a good day and thanks for u're time.
 
 
 

Hi everybody, Thanks nona a million for your interest in my letter, I have worked on it all the day and it's now a little different.

Thanks for all, I'm waiting for your advices 

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to apply for the Master on ****************** with the intention of showing my interest and motivation in being admitted for this master.

With this letter, I would like to introduce myself as a holder of a bachelor degree from University of  *********, Faculty of Economic Sciences and Management where I studied Computer Sciences Applied for Management.

My aim is to work in an international field of work related to communication and networking. Therefore I want to gain a deeper empirical knowledge in communication networks as well as improve my personal skills.

During my studies I have enjoyed empirical tasks and I always felt at ease when I was involved in practical and concrete projects, as a result I had had many opportunities to participate in the achievement of such a projects.

Furthermore, to prepare myself and to demonstrate my interest in this master, I was taking additional English courses at ************* during all the last year (from July 2005 to July 2006) and now I am  attending a preparation course for the TOEFL exam which I am going to take on August 26 th, thus an email will be sent to you at *****@*****.com 15 business days later with my results. In addition I took Italian language classes at the ‘Istituito Italiano di Cultura’ and participated in cultural events such as: attending Italian fashion days and information days about studying in Italy at the institute, and going to concerts, balais and movies at the "Théatre municipale ". I am always interested in discovering new cultures, especially Mediterranean ones and above all Italian and old Roman culture. I have previous work experience at an Italian textile company, in fact some members of my family have a good relationship with an Italian family, they both share a business and I used to work with them during the summer. In addition I have done two internships, which were not obligatory in the intention to gain additional practical experience .I tremendously enjoyed my experience working at the CNI (Centre National de l'Informatique) as it was as close as possible to communication and network field. It was really a terrific experience, because there I had the opportunity to take part in an interesting project (witch was my last year project) with a very qualified team. Also I have the opportunity to take part of the IT team of the CNSS ( Caisse National de Sécurité Sociale ) for two months.

Through my previous college and work experience, I have developed my academic and technical skills as well as skills in social volunteer activities. In fact, as a member of AIESEC*, I would be able to adapt to a constantly changing life environment, and also establish and maintain good social and working relationships with individuals of different culture backgrounds.

Also, as a member of AIESEC*, I learned how to communicate, be respectful and gain the respect of others, I used to host and help students who come to Tunisia as trainees. I think this experience would help me very much, especially when working in a global environment like nowadays. In this respect I also want to mention that I am someone who is motivated, ambitious, very organized and open mind.

I have already visited the master website at http://******** and took a deep view on the course program, really I found it the most suitable for my aptitudes and desires.    

Finally, this experience would give me the opportunity to train and live in Italy, to meet friendly people and learn more about Italian culture, witch I always wish to do.

Thank you for your time and interest. I look forward to hear from you in the near future.

Yours   sincerely                                                                                                         

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could u please except the grammatical mistakes give me some advices (changing some BLOCKED EXPRESSION?

Is the letter so long?

Thank u very much one mor time.

have a good day.