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Often in business we are disappointed with broken promises and/or service that is mediocre.My mission statement is to give uncompromising personal service with my unconditional guarantee. You are invited to contact any of my clients and speak to them about my performance.
Could this statement be written better... your opinions please?
Mediocre works just fine in that sentence.
Hi,
'Mediocre' seems fine here. Certainly nobody wants mediocre service!
It's always possible to tinker around with things, but I think this writing is pretty good. It has strength, clarity, directness and confidence.
Good luck, Clive
How's this?:
In business we are often disappointed by broken promises and mediocre service.My mission, and unconditional guarantee, is to give uncompromising personal service. You are invited to contact any of my clients for information regarding my performance.
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Thanks much to those who have posted thus far. In the late 50's I was a kid in the Army.There was another Private that was very proficient with language and grammer and Officers would shy away from him out of fear that he might use a word or sentence that they did not understand. His name was Robert Darling and I will never forget him. Ahh... the power of a great vocabulary... Thanks again.
It must also have been very awkward for the officers when they gave him a direct order.
MrP