Anonymous:
A revolution originates from a, through a reign , founded on the suppression and exploitation of the working class created mood.

I'd be greatful if you could help me

I forumlated this rather comlicated sentence in a homework for english and I am not sure if its correct grammar.
Hi,

A revolution originates from a, through a reign , founded on the suppression and exploitation of the working class created mood.

I forumlated this rather comlicated sentence in a homework for english and I am not sure if its correct grammar. Your sentence has some serious flaws that you need to correct.


originates from a ....what... Is there a word missing?

through a reign What are you talking about here? Do you mean a period of government? 'Reign' is a word for kings.

created mood This phrase does not seem to fit. You could really put a period after 'class' and have a complete thought.

Why don't you revise this sentence, and then post it again for comments?

Best wishes, Clive
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Anonymous:
ok I'll try to explain my sentence

A revolution originates from (a (the mood ist ment)) through a reign (political system) , founded (based) on the suppression and ex.... of the working class , created mood

so the mood ist created through a reign which is founded (based) on the suppression and ex... of the working class and this mood is the origin of a revolution
Two revisions, with slightly different emphases--

A revolution of the working class is sparked by a suppressive and exploitative ruling class.

A regime founded on the suppression and exploitation of the working class creates the mood/climate for revolution.
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In English we don't use those long phrases as modifiers before the noun. We place those phrases after the noun.

For example, in English we don't say the in the garage parked car. We say the car parked in the garage. We don't say the in the chair sitting girl. We say the girl sitting in the chair.

So, reversing the word order into English word order, I think you're saying
A revolution originates from a mood created through a reign founded on the suppression and exploitation of the working class.

Now it seems a little more like English, but some of the words are still a little weird for English, specifically mood and through a reign, which I'm guessing -- only guessing -- are supposed to mean something like climate (atmosphere, milieu) and by a political system (regime). So I think you want to say it like this, which is more English in structure:

A revolution originates from a climate created by a political system founded on the suppression and exploitation of the working class.

CJ
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Anonymous:
Thank you very much !!

I'll most certainly consider your suggestions in my next essay.

sicerely
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