Hi Antonija,
I'm not sure if you realize that you need to include with this 'cover letter' a copy of 'your' resume or CV. The letter should thus just focus on the highlights of your application. You have too many mundane details here. Think about what the employer wants. eg Can she sell? Can she work independently? Can she learn about new products quickly?
Best wishes, Clive
Could you please read this job application and correct the mistakes. Thanks
Dear Sir/Madam,
I saw your advertisement for a medical representative in XY newspapers, issued on 18 March 2006. I am very interested in the job because I enjoy working with people and I have the required communication skills, as well as many of the necessary qualifications.
I was born on 03 March 1979 in XY. Birth date is not relevant and should not be included. I graduated from high school in 1997. I graduated from the University of Rijeka Medical School in November 2004 and I took medical exam in May 2005. I have a valid driving licence (B cat.) and I speak English fluently and have passive knowledge of Italian language. Although I have never worked as a medical representative, I have been in medical practice for almost two years – one year during my internship and eight months working as a general practitioner (still working).
I am very interested in the position and I hope you will consider my application. I am looking forward to meeting you.
Yours faithfully,
XY, M.D.