Kindly chk my cover letter & correct it. Thks for your time & consideration

(You can't start a letter like this.Say something like dear sir/madam) With reference to the advertisement on website address for the position for of the topic of interest/ topic advertisement topic, I am writing in a hope that you might be able to offer me the same (same what?). I would be happy to join in your research group.

I am a Bachelor in Biochemistry (1999-2002) from Periyar Univeristy and Masters in Biochemistry (2002-2004) from the University of Madras with a strong inclination towards research in Neurobiology. Having gained a strong theoretical background in the basics of Neurobiology during my academic years, I would like to explore further by doing a doctoral program in your research wing.

            A very good theoretical knowledge from my present job and practical experience gained in National Institute of Mental Health and Neurosciences, NIMHANS, Bangalore will help me pursue this doctorate degree. Being proficient in academics I am also a "people person"(I haven't heard of this before) who mingles well with others. I have been an amicable person both in my academic and corporate environment.

With a good academic background and strong interpersonal skills, I firmly believe if I being am accepted for this program I would will put my maximum efforts into striving for excellence.Please review my CV for other value adding courses and other information.Thanks for your time and consideration. I will be looking forward for to your reply.

Yours Sincerely,   

This is my try.

 Hi Doll

This is corrected Version. Kindly do the needful. Thanks in advance

Dear Sir

With reference to the advertisement on website address for the position for of the topic of interest/ topic advertisement topic, I am writing in a hope that you might be able to offer me a PhD studentship position. I would be happy to join in your research group.

I am a Bachelor in Biochemistry (1999-2002) from Periyar Univeristy and Masters in Biochemistry (2002-2004) from the University of Madras with a strong inclination towards research in Neurobiology. Having gained a strong theoretical background in the basics of Neurobiology during my academic years, I would like to explore further by doing a doctoral program in your research wing.

            A very good theoretical knowledge from my present job and practical experience gained in National Institute of Mental Health and Neurosciences, NIMHANS, Bangalore will help me pursue this doctorate degree. Being proficient in academics I am also a "people person"(I haven't heard of this before) who mingles well with others. I have been an amicable person both in my academic and corporate environment.

With a good academic background and strong interpersonal skills, I firmly believe if I am accepted for this program I will put my maximum efforts into striving for excellence. Please review my CV for other courses and information. Thanks for your time and consideration. I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours Sincerely,   

Here is a Query!

1. Being proficient in academics I am also a "people person"(I haven't heard of this before) who mingles well with others

For the above sentence I am trying to say that I can easy going person with people of different culture. Can you suggest a similar sentence.

1) Thanks for your time and consideration.
2) I will be looking forward to your reply.

3) is an extra
4) I am also a "people person"...

1) Thanks for your time and consideration. If you want an advice: drop it. I have seen it in a sample but I don't think it is very helpful.

2)I look forward to hearing from you. In my opinion this is the best ending and I use it all the time. I will be looking implicate you are not quite sure. This is not the appropriate tense, if you are sure. I see no need for 'will be looking'.

3) If you want a better ending insted of 'with a good..': I would welcome the unique opportunity to work as part of your successful team, to benefit from your extensive experience, and to put my training, experience, creativity and enthusiasm into practice for XYZ. Or something like that:-)

4) My social skills are excelent as well as my ability to understand foreign cultures and to adapt to them.  Please drop ''people person'', there are other ways to point at your social skills.

5) Sorry but the letter is extravagant and not in a good way. Maybe you should make it more formal and close to the letter they usually receive. Personaly, I don't like the structure. It should have the following structure:

a) Introducing: Why am I writing.  1-2 sentenses.
b) Main Letter: Why am I the wright person for the job/the scholarship. Very important: do not repeat your CV. Use the CV to show, what have you done and your advantages but do not simply repeat the CV. This is a very important distincion.
aa) My education, expirience etc.
bb) My skills.
c) Ending: 1-2 sentenses.

but you can say I am a peoples' person

Sorry, but I woudn't recommend a phrase, which could not be found within a dictionary like Longman, Dictonary of Contemporary English or Cambridge Advanced Learner's Dictionary. Longman/Cambridge only refer a man/woman of the people.
As for me, 'I am a peoples' person' sounds like slang. Of course you can say that, but I have grave doubts, if one should write it in a formal litter like cover letter and hopes for some good results.