Kindly help me rephrase this para with perfect grammar

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Anonymous  #469318  Sun, 27 Jan 08 08:19 AM

Royal offer for royal customer, that’s you!

You don’t buy jewellery everyday, but when you do, it’s a special occasion. We know that making the right choice takes time. But we made it easy for you with the price that you won’t find anywhere with certified VVS quality diamonds. We are delighted to present the best offer. We have just made that occasion more special for you.

  
Mister Micawber  #469331  Sun, 27 Jan 08 09:04 AM

A royal offer for a royal customer-- that’s you!

You don’t buy jewellery every day, so when you do, it’s a special occasion. We know that making the right choice takes time, but we've made it easy for you with prices on certified VVS quality diamonds that you won’t find anywhere else. We are delighted to offer you these prices and make that special occasion even more special for you.



  
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Anonymous  #469363  Sun, 27 Jan 08 11:22 AM

You don’t buy jewellery every day, so when you do, it’s a special occasion. We know that making the right choice takes time, but we've made it easy for you with prices on certified VVS quality diamonds that you won’t find anywhere else. We are delighted to offer you these prices and make that special occasion even more special for you.


sir how is this line

....but we've made it easy for you with prices that you won't find anywhere else. what's more! it's certified VVS quality diamonds...

I am just thinking to replace this line in the secomd line of the para kindly let me know is this sound perfect grammatically.

  
Mister Micawber  #469373  Sun, 27 Jan 08 12:46 PM


....but we've made it easy for you with prices that you won't find anywhere else. What's more, they're certified VVS quality diamonds...

But I think this is not as good as the original.  'What's more, they are' is added verbiage with no content.



  
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