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CyberDuck  +  964310 Sat, 07 Nov 09 02:13 PM
Hello!

It would be so nice if you were to waste a bit of your time to take a peek at my leaflet. I'd like to know where it needs improvement. :)

Thanks you in advance.


 

The town from the end of the rainbow

What, where, who?
Passing by Monuk and you're under 15 years old? Fear not, young lad! This is the town you've ever dreamt at. Build sometimes back in the depths of history, by powerful people that unfortunately were forgotten by history, Monuk is a paradise for any outsider! On the right side of the Danube river, placed in the flatlands, you can't possibly ever get cold or bored here! It is also called "the town from the end of the rainbow" because there are some nifty luminous effects, all natural, visible especially during summertime.

What to do here?
There's nothing you can't do here! Take a stroll down our ancient street, breath some fresh air in the secular park, swim with the fish and so forth. We even have skateboarding contests and drawing with coloured chalk on the pavement championships. If you arrive sometime in summer, almost every night there are fireworks fired in the sky. Arrive in winter and you have the chance to skate on the frozen lake from the middle of the town. Get here anytime you'd like and you can do whatever fancies your imagination.

...because imagination flows from here!
All you have to do is to give us a ring or drop us a line (number and e-mail address are on the other side of the paper). If you come, be sure to bring some friends, because sharing fun has never been any funnier!

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julielai  +  964754 Sun, 08 Nov 09 02:29 AM
More names of places and events may be helpful (esp. in "What to do here").  I don't think it reads like something targeted at teenagers.
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CyberDuck  +  965202 Sun, 08 Nov 09 03:30 PM
It's for 12-14 year old children. I see now -- I pretty much treated them as... 8 year olds :P


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