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Diddy  #227052  Fri, 19 May 06 11:10 PM

I am writing a letter about the overweight problems in the US and as it is going to be  send to a lot of people the gramma should be good so therefore please correct the mistakes that might occur.

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I have heard from a friend of mine who went to college for a year in some north state I cannot remember which one, but that does really matter. What I am talking about is the food. She said that in the cantine you could only get in her opinion 'Junk food' which means Burgers, French fries, Pizza, and all that kind of stuff. She got tired of the food quickly. So as a bit ironic she lost weight during her stay. Is it right that you can get in my opinion 'proper food' do you have to eat 'junk food'. She said that on the college no other food was aviable. I think that, that is kind of sad I mean why do they have to eat all that junk food I have also heard that so many of the young pupils in Texas have already encountered overweight problems, even the young ones. And the problem is that overweight is a part of your life, it will shorten it and give you a hell lot of disesas which is not good either. Furthermore the society are spending billions of money on those people. So why has it come so far? Another good example is the movie called 'Super size Me' where this director eats McDonald food for a whole month and he almost dies of it. I have used the ' around junk food beacuse it depends on who you are some might say that one is and some might say that the same thing is not, it is individual, what you define as junk food.

  
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Mister Micawber  #227115  Sat, 20 May 06 02:55 AM

Hello, Diddy.

This is a rambling, conversational letter that you might as well leave as is. To make it a formal letter requires your reviewing it carefully for punctuation, spelling mistakes, and interjected comments.

  
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Diddy  #227192  Sat, 20 May 06 09:28 AM
Oh I see thank you I will do that.
  
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