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Jonas  #468583  Fri, 25 Jan 08 02:23 AM

Hey guys!

Its the first time I wrote such a letter, so could anyone please read it through and tell me what to improve?

That would be great!

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Dear Madame/Sir,

I am writing to apply for the Bachelor's degree programme in ***.

I did my A-Levels in July 2007 in a German grammar school, ***, in ***, a town near the Dutch border. My main subjects focused on Mathematics and English. Furthermore, I took part in a two year politics course. In this period I learnt basic knowledge such as how supply and demand form the equilibrium price, Keynesian policy, monetarism and duties of the ECB, which provoked my strong interest in economy.

As I live less than an hour away from *** I seized the opportunity to visit the Open Day at *** in spring 2006. When I came back home that evening I was certain that *** is the right university for me. There are several reasons why I prefer *** compared to German universities.

In the first place, the whole program is taught in English, which is in my opinion necessary when aiming at an international career. Secondly, as I am an open-minded person, I like the international character of ***. Furthermore, the opportunity to study abroad and choose from a wide range of partner universities all over the globe make it even more interesting for me to study in ***. Moreover, I appreciate the small classrooms at ***. When I was on the Open Day I was able to take part in a tutorial group simulation and I believe that *** is an excellent way of learning.

Talking to former students at your university and knowing about the brilliant reputation your faculty is enjoying, I am convinced I will be well-prepared for my future career. Not only by learning theories but also by gaining analytical and practical skills, improving my proficiency in English and studying in an international environment.

After school I went to Australia for seven months for several reasons:
It was important for me not to directly go to university after school, but to do something else apart from studying. Going to the other side of the globe for more than half a year, working and traveling my way, experiencing something new and meet different people made me more self-sufficient, open-minded and not at least more motivated to study than I was ever before. I lived and worked with lots of people from nearly every continent, which assured me of the fact that I will do well in an international environment such as ***.

Thank you very much for considering my application

  
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Anonymous  #469208  Sun, 27 Jan 08 02:50 AM

Dear Madame/Sir,

I am writing to apply for the Bachelor's degree programme at ***.

I completed my A-Levels in July 2007 at ****, a German grammar school in ***, a town near the Dutch border. My main subjects focused on Mathematics and English. Furthermore, I took part in a two-year political course. In this period,  I learnt the basics of how supply and demand form the equilibrium price, Keynesian policy, monetarism,  and duties of the ECB - all of which provoked a strong interest in economics.

As I live less than an hour away from *** , I took the opportunity to visit the Open Day at *** in spring 2006. When I came back home that evening , I was certain that *** would be the right university for me.

There are several reasons why I prefer *** compared to German universities. First, the entire program is taught in English, which I feel to be necessary when aiming for an international career. Secondly, as I am an open-minded person, I like the international character of  the student body at ***. Furthermore, the opportunity to study abroad and choose from a wide range of partner universities all over the globe makes it very interesting. I also appreciate the small classrooms at ***. When I attended Open Day,  I was able to take part in a tutorial group simulation and I believe that *** offers an excellent learning environment.

Speaking with former students at your university and knowing about the brilliant reputation your faculty is enjoying, I am convinced I will be well-prepared for my future career. I look forward to not only learning theories but also gaining analytical and practical skills, improving my proficiency in English,  and studying in an international setting.

After _______ school,  I went to Australia for seven months. At that time, I chose to not go to university directly after school, but insted, I wanted to experience something else apart from studying. Going to the other side of the globe for more than half a year, working and traveling my way, experiencing something new and meetiing different people made me more self-sufficient and open-minded. I am now more motivated to study more than ever before. I lived and worked with many people from nearly every continent, which gives me the confidence to do well in an international environment such as ***.

Thank you very much for considering my application


  
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