thanks for the advice...just wants to make something that attracts attention. Do you think i should phrase it more traditionally?
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well here a different version of the second paragraph:
After my
regular graduation I decided to specialize with commercial and languages. Thus, I
participated to a special program of a Commercial College at the Berufskolleg Neuss.
The name of the program is European Business Class and the emphases include:
--Extended foreign language abilities
(Besides the lesson English, the economic classes were taught in English. Plus,
two years Spanish).
--A special subject „Business
Administration” provided knowledge about history, economic and culture of the
other European countries.
--Variety outdoor activities advanced
attainments in scheduling of projects, presentation and informatics.
Furthermore, an intercultural training and the work placement abroad of the EBC
students equipped basics in intercultural affairs.
After the first year of the
commercial college I’ve accomplished a work placement by the finance company
LBS. Over 3 weeks competent knowledge in finance, responsibly working and
dealing with customers was added to my capabilities.
In order of the focus languages I attended
a work placement in Eastbourne, England for two weeks. There, I performed to a
work placement by the company Association of Charity Shops. Due to the work placement
I gained experience from all aspects of this company and interacting with
English speaking people. Thus, I experienced the satisfaction of working with
the English language.
To enhance
my higher education I decided to run a work placement by the renowned
advertising agency BBDO. Thereby, I dealt with many customers and also English
speaking customers. This work placement taught me to performing responsibly
affairs by my own and under pressure. Furthermore, many huge in-house projects
took place with my attendance.