Letter of Motivation for Eventmanagement

       Hello everyone here.

I found a university that seems to be perfect for me, it its located in germany but the programme is 100% in english, they have a lot of partners such as Lufthansa Aida etc.
It seems to be perfect for me because i always wanted to expand to another county such as america.I see my Future in America anyways.
so right now i am preparing to apply for the university, they wanted to have an LoM, so i started to write one, to me quite a long time to find the right words to exppress my self and where i get my motivation for the bachelor programm in Eventmanagement.

So could you guys please read it and give me some feedback.if you ask me its not "complete" im missing something but i cant figure out what.

Dear Sirs,

 

I am writing to apply for the Bachelors programme in Eventmanagement at your university.I have set my goals for success and  am determined to take the long path of hard and arduous work to achieve them.What Keeps me motivated to stick on my Goal is a quote from Frank Lloyd Wright:

 

“The price of success is dedication, hard work and an unremitting devotion to the things you want to see happen”

 

In recent years, I have been aware that I constantly enjoy and feel comfortable interacting and socializing with different types of individuals and situations. In turn, this is why I would choose a profession which allows me to utilize these social and organizational skills with others and also challenge my creative appetite.

In 2005 I graduated with a degree in Computer Science from “**Name of school*” located in ***city*, During this period I completed an Internship at “***companyname***” GmbH, where I was able to experience the power of teamwork. I also experienced and built the necessary skills to cope with and handle the pressures and demands involved in a multi-functional job environment

I completed my alternative-service in the Dental Clinic of the Uni-klinikum **location****. At this job I gained more experience in Time Management skills as I was simultaneously working on many projects with extraneous applications.

I choose to attend the International University *****name of uni****** to further my education and would also hope that through my expericeses and insight I would positevly contribute to the school and its student body.

 

 

Regards

myname

Do you guys have any ideas what i could add or change?

I am thankful for everyhelp i get           

well why the change from computers is a good question.See i need alternation in my Job.and a job that challenges me.if the Job is monotone i get bored really quick.I read about Eventmanagement and it made click.i was convicted that this is exactly what i wanted.I talked to a friend who is organising events and he told me that it is not only funny and not only hanging around at the Event.He told me that you have to spend time in the office, organising everything via Telephone and internet with the vendors and for example with catering, than you have to be at the job side, and for example clean up, or help putting tables and chairs together, you have to be at the Event and make sure everything is working as intended, you have to talk to the principal.You have to associate with your connections and customers.

That a lot of variety, just like i want it.
it is very hard for me to write down my "motivation" even if i have the motivation for this programme, even if im no taken yet at the university, im already preparing for it.The motivation is existing, i just cant write it down

Hello Kathrin,

All right i changed the sentence to "Dear Sir or Madam,"

Well i thought it was a good idea because that quote really keeps me going on.so is it wrong just because german profs.and teachers are not used to it?i can drop it, no big deal.

creative appetite yes i wrote that, because as i said, i need to be challenged, if the work gets monotone, im out.

Should i maybe rewrite it in : ..organizational skills with others and also exposes my creative veign. ?

actually i added a couple a thinks,ill try to post that later.

Hallo Kathrin
ich hab noch mal weiter getippt.evtl kannst du noch mal hier drüber schauen //Hey Kathrin went on with the writing, perhaps you could read over it one more time and let me know what you think

Dear Sir or Madam,        

 

My name is *********, I am twenty years old and live in *******/Germany.

I am writing to apply for the Bachelors programme in Eventmanagement at your university. I grew up in a big family, thereby I took advantage of the opportunity to provide myself insight into different branches. I learned how to associate with customers when I was working as a waiter and bartender in a local restaurant called “*****************” and in the parental gastronomy.

During School holidays and weekends I worked at the decoration company “*******” where I developed my organisational and creative skills as we decorated shopping malls, wedding premises and the ***** Airport.

In recent years, I have been aware that I constantly enjoy and feel comfortable interacting and socializing with different types of individuals and situations.

In turn, this is why I would choose a profession which allows me to utilize these social and organizational skills with others and also challenges my creative veign.

In 2005 I graduated with a degree in Computer Science from “*************” located in ******, during this period I completed an Internship at “*******” GmbH, where I was able to experience the power of teamwork. I also experienced and built the necessary skills to cope with and handle the pressure and demands involved in a multi-functional job environment.

I completed my alternative-service in the ************************************. At this job I gained more experience in Time Management skills as I was simultaneously working on many projects with extraneous applications.

I choose my Internships cautiously to be able to fall back on a broad range of knowledge, experience and professions.

I choose to attend the International University of Applied Sciences ********************* to further my education and would also hope that through my experiences and insight I would positevly contribute to the school and its student body.

Yours Sincerely *******