letter of motivation

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Nofretete86  #234188  Fri, 09 Jun 06 01:29 PM

Hi! I need help with my letter of motivation for university, could someone please correct my English??? thank you!

For a very long time now I’ve been aware that my future job has to be an international one because ever since I’ve shown a great interest in foreign cultures and languages. During my language studies over two semesters at the Sprachen- und Dolmetscherinstitut München in order to become a translator with the speciality economics, I’ve already collected higher language skills in French and English. While attending this school I had to realize that the specialisation on languages only does not correspond to my ideas of my future. Beyond the usage of foreign languages I’m interested in the cooperation with other people as well as the deepening of further subjects beyond languages.  Moreover I later want to have a job in which I’m challenged, in which I’m confronted with new situations and in which I can find new solutions by using my intellect and my creativity. Besides, I would like to save the option of being able to work in various domains, of being able to work together with various people and cultures and of opening up promotion prospects by my own achievements. That’s why I decided to abandon my language studies and start an education in the domain of tourism. I’m someone who likes working in a team, who is motivated , initiative and ambitious and I’m looking forward learning a third foreign language. After studying I would like to work several years abroad, for which I think your  practice oriented course of studies of Tourism Management and Leisure Industry , including a semester abroad and with the fact that the courses will be taught in English, which corresponds to my international interest ,I think your university  will create a good basis. In conclusion I think that your university offers exactly the education I’m seeking for and I’m willing to work hard to achieve the best

  
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Diehard  #234589  Sat, 10 Jun 06 01:52 PM

hi:

First of all you should structure your text. It is very hard to read for us because you don't have any paragraphes. Use the help that is posted here (http://www.englishforums.com/English/WriteMotivationCoverLetter/bzlmn/Post.htm) to see what you should write in each paragraph.

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